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Anonymous Posted 17 years ago
Letter Writing
Motivation
hello! i was wondering if someone would be so kind so as to help me. i have to write a sort of motivation letter...sort of because is limited to 900 characters. the motivation letter is for a traineeship in an human rights organisation.
Although living in a Europe promoting social cohesion, tolerance and democracy yet there are many places in the Union where people are deprived of fundametal rights. Millions of people are experiencing poverty and social exclusion in the European Union. Millions of people are denied the right to decent housing or decent work. Millions of people are tortured and abused of on acount of their ethnic backround or religious believes. * society is a place where all the above mentioned are very much present and social cohesion, tolerance and democracy are just empty words devoid of any significance stressed out by politicians in campaign speeches. Coming from a country where at 20 years after the eliberation from the comunist regime fundamental rights is still an issue, I think of myself as a person who would like to make a change and the training program at * seems like a perfect start. I find it not only a great opportunity but also an atractive way of aquiring practical experience and knowledge of day to day work in *
did i talk to much about general issues and not enough me? anyway the text is 1000 characters and needs to be cut down so please help me out
many thanks
Although living in a Europe promoting social cohesion, tolerance and democracy yet there are many places in the Union where people are deprived of fundametal rights. Millions of people are experiencing poverty and social exclusion in the European Union. Millions of people are denied the right to decent housing or decent work. Millions of people are tortured and abused of on acount of their ethnic backround or religious believes. * society is a place where all the above mentioned are very much present and social cohesion, tolerance and democracy are just empty words devoid of any significance stressed out by politicians in campaign speeches. Coming from a country where at 20 years after the eliberation from the comunist regime fundamental rights is still an issue, I think of myself as a person who would like to make a change and the training program at * seems like a perfect start. I find it not only a great opportunity but also an atractive way of aquiring practical experience and knowledge of day to day work in *
did i talk to much about general issues and not enough me? anyway the text is 1000 characters and needs to be cut down so please help me out
many thanks
Top answer
Hi, In my opinion, you need to be more direct and, as you suggest, more focused on yourself. Try this. Write this again in the form of a series of paragraphs starting with 'I want to do this traineeship because .
- Hi, In my opinion, you need to be more direct and, as you suggest, more focused on yourself.
- Try this.
- Write this again in the form of a series of paragraphs starting with 'I want to do this traineeship because .
- .
- ' Put one reason in each paragraph.
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Hi,
In my opinion, you need to be more direct and, as you suggest, more focused on yourself.
Try this. Write this again in the form of a series of paragraphs starting with
'I want to do this traineeship because . . . . '
Put one reason in each paragraph.
After that, we can look at the details of your English.
Best wishes, Clive
In my opinion, you need to be more direct and, as you suggest, more focused on yourself.
Try this. Write this again in the form of a series of paragraphs starting with
'I want to do this traineeship because . . . . '
Put one reason in each paragraph.
After that, we can look at the details of your English.
Best wishes, Clive
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