Motivaion Letter correction

Hello, could you please give a help for me and comment on my motivation letter:

Dear Sirs, Madams:
I am Vladislav Yurovskiy, the 2nd year student of Turiba University. It was an immense pleasure for me to beware of the Latvian Government scholarship and with this letter I would like to express my aspiration of obtaining this chance.
I have always been thinking about my future, building career, becoming a successful person and generally finding my own path in my life.
Almost all my extended family, including my uncles, aunts and cousins has not received higher education. However, their entire life has been dedicated to family business of being merchants. Hence, I have grown among entrepreneurs and it had great influence on the development of my personality so since early childhood I have had acquaintance with the sphere of business. However, I had already learnt the importance of education in nowadays live; consequently since graduation of the school, I have decided to combine the knowledge of entrepreneurship with higher education.
When I was a child, my family could not boast with a surplus of money. We had to tighten our belts in order to meet basic needs. As a result, in my neighborhood I was known to be as hyperactive and nimble child. I was always in the search of money. When I was 10, I managed to sell for scrap an old and unused track that stood in the yard of our dwelling house. It was my first achievement from which I understood that I can make money by my own for my personal needs. Thereafter I have started to find new sources of money by selling almost everything that I was able to sell. I used to sell flowers, walnut, acorns, pears, peaches and other things up to wastepaper. Eventually, since my 5th form I have never asked my parents for pocket money.
After graduation of school, I have started to be interested in politics. Particularly, the interest in the sphere of politics and the environment in which I was inculcated me the sense of education and inspired me to use my entrepreneur skills in smarter manner. While being in lyceum I joined the Uzbek national youth association “Kamolot”, where I also glorified as an active member of the party by organizing various types of activities, including charity programs for disabled and mentally retarded children, assistance programs for pensioners, sport and other health recreation and environmental events. Organization of all above mentioned activities gave me good organizational skills, leadership abilities and the sense of responsibility. The time spend in lyceum increased my interest in the science of business and I firmly decided to connect my future career with business field, wishing to gain success in the future. And if I become successful I will pay back my parents for their warmth and loving tender, as they have been those who have been supporting me throughout my life.
For that reason I constructed a plan for achieving this long-term aim. By the plan I accomplished some small objectives: learnt the English language to an advanced level and enrolled to foreign University. Now in Turiba University I am considered to be in the number of best students in the international flow. I also use any chance to take a part in various activities as East Asian Marketing and IT courses that Turiba organizes. I have already won an Erasmus plus program to Portugal, but did not go because of complexity of VISA procedure. In the nearest future I will have my practice in Real Estate Company in Spain.
My ultimate professional goal to my extended future is to contribute to the society by developing business sphere. Mainly, since I have a quite good acquaintance in sales and finance that derived from my life experience, I would like to conduct my own researches in the sectors of Management, Sales and Finance of small and medium enterprises in an international context. For that reason, after graduation of Turiba University I plan to continue my Master’s degree up to obtaining PhD.
Due to my financial situation I was able to continue my study abroad, but I can’t devote myself on 100 percent to the study, since I am not in a position to finance my studies now. Therefore, the chance that provides Latvian State Education Development Agency is vital for me in order to implement my above mentioned plans. I consider, the opportunity of being in the list of members who were granted the scholarship not just as a financial assistance for my study, but also as a challenge for me and as a kind of achievement in my life. I will be very grateful to be provided with scholarship to improve my education and incent my career prospects.
With a solid foundation in a business field due to ma pertinent work experience and an immense incentive to improve myself and broaden my knowledge for the sake of the ideology of development of an international business and an eager beaver character, I believe that I could contribute to the society in the future, otherwise why do we live on the planet if we do not make the contribution? I also do not want to merely exist, I want to live and leave mark on history by providing benefit to the society.
Thank you very much for considering my application. I look forward to your positive response.

Yours sincerely,
Vladislav Yurovskiy