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Anonymous Posted 19 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

mot letter: I really need help with the third and "last" part of it

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01b00Im going to apply for the course of International Business at the University of Maastricht. Im not a native speaker so it is kind of hard for me to express myself in english. I think the third part of my mot letter (why am i the right person for the university, why i want to go there...) is way to short. Maybe you can help me with it or give me some ideas for it.02b02br
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01b00Thanks a lot02b02br
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01b00Björn02b02br
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01b00""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""02br
00Due to my interest for business and my passion of travelling and 02br
00international experiences, I feel that the International Business course at 02br
00the University of Maastricht offers a grand opportunity for me to attain my 02br
00goal of becoming a MY HARD CORE GOAL HERE: IT MUST SEEM GOAL ORIENTED 02br
00AND NOT JUST “OH I THINK BUSINESS IS LIKE….SUPER COOL”. I find the 02br
00“problem based learning” method expressed on the open day highly effective 02br
00as I believe that one can learn best by doing. I am a dedicated and 02br
00motivated person who can bring valuable insight and experiences to the table 02br
00and work with an international group dynamically. 02br
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00Please find enclosed, …………… letters….etc 02br
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00I can be available for a follow-up interview at any time. 02br
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00Thank you for you attention in this matter. 02br
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00Sincerely, 02br
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00"""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""02b0-
  

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0The paragraph looks okay to me. I'd fix these, however:02br 02br 00I 01b 00can be 02b 00available for a follow-up interview at any time. 02br 02br 00Thank you for 01b 00you 02b 00attention in this matter.

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  • 0The paragraph looks okay to me.
  • I'd fix these, however:02br 02br 00I 01b 00can be 02b 00available for a follow-up interview at any time.
  • 02br 02br 00Thank you for 01b 00you 02b 00attention in this matter.
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0The paragraph looks okay to me. I'd fix these, however:02br
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00I 01b00can be 02b00available for a follow-up interview at any time. 02br
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00Thank you for 01b00you 02b00attention in this matter. 0-
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1b00Due to my interest 01font00in02font00 business and my passion 01font00for02font00 travelling and 02br
00international experiences, I feel that the International Business course at 02br
00the University of Maastricht offers 01font00an ide02f
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