Mosja - Correct my writing please (Pt1)
I've got an essay and it due on Thursday. Could you correct it for me please?
Here's an introductory paragraph
Having one ring that can do anything for you without the need of credit cards or your house and car keys can be mind-blowing. You don’t need to have a bunch of cards in your wallet anymore. Additionally, it monitors your steps, distance, and active minutes. Even your heart rate. Your ring will be your action hub (or “a hub for every action you do”? can both be used?). This Is called “Smart Ring”.
Thank you
Mosja
Top answer
What exact topic or question are you writing about? Your writing is very informal (eg don't instead of do not ). You are not always using complete sentences.
- What exact topic or question are you writing about?
- Your writing is very informal (eg don't instead of do not ).
- You are not always using complete sentences.
- ) Clive
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What exact topic or question are you writing about?
Your writing is very informal (eg don't instead of do not).
You are not always using complete sentences. (eg Even your heart rate.)
Clive
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