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0(1) Whenever I listen to television-01del00unfortunately I have to do it once in a while to keep up with what's going on02del00-but 80 percent of every statement made about Islam is factually false. But it goes on and is repeated and repeated and repeated.02br
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00Usage of "but" and sentence construction, is it ok? Please check.02br
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00(2) Dialogue going on right now, as we stand here, with major Jewish figures, is much more than there was twenty years ago, which is one of the very good signs upon the horizons.02br
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00Comma usage before "is"? Please check.02br
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00(3) And the 00 of 00, together with the people of 0100Israel0200, and the faith of 010200, constitute the triangle we call Judaism.02br
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00Should it be constitutes? S-V agreement check02br
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00(4) Religion, that is, you and I, have a vital role to play in this historic task. If we don't, our message of peace and love of all God's creatures will ring as hollow as cynics and opponents say it does.02br
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00Have or has? S-V agreement, please check. Does author uses "have" for "you and I"?02br
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00(5) Now, in the Jewish world, the state of 010200, either for or against, has been at the root of every single fundamentalist movement. Some Jewish fundamentalists are passionately for the state of 0100Israel0200, the secular state of 010200 which they see as sacred. Others see the state of 010200 as at best a neutral value.02br
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00Should it be passionate? Please advise.02br
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00(6) I wish I could pass on the same message which I gave this conference about ahimsa, nonabsolutism and nonattachment, and you panelists can take this message further out and take this message for further nonviolence and bring about peace and justice everywhere.02br
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00Can "in" be inserted before "this conference"?02br
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00(7) This proposal had been slowly gathering steam and, after the events of September 11, 2001, it seemed an ideal project to demonstrate that religions can work together if they came together to produce such a declaration, and to demonstrate further that the religious-secular divide could also be overcome were this to happen, for such a declaration could only be produced by a convergence of religious and secular discourse.02br
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00Can "were this to happen" be changed to "if this was to happen"? Please advise.0-
  

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02br 02br 00 00 00(4) Religion, that is, you and I, has a vital role to play in this historic task. 02br 02br 00 00 00 01u 00Religion, that is, you and I02u 00 is an odd thing to say. 02br 02br 005) Now, in the Jewish world, the state of Israel, and passions either either for or against it, has been at the root of every single fundamentalist movement.

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  • 02br 02br 00 00 00(4) Religion, that is, you and I, has a vital role to play in this historic task.
  • 02br 02br 00 00 00 01u 00Religion, that is, you and I02u 00 is an odd thing to say.
  • 02br 02br 005) Now, in the Jewish world, the state of Israel, and passions either either for or against it, has been at the root of every single fundamentalist movement.
  • Some Jewish fundamentalists are passionately for the state of Israel, the secular state of Israel which they see as sacred.
  • 02br 02br 02br 02br 00This whole sentence needs rewriting in a clearer way, in my opinion.
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00Since you have such a long post, I've just focused on writing it the way that I think is best.02br
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00(1) Whenever I listen to television, 80 percent of every statement made about Islam is factually false, but it is repeated and repeated and repeated.02br
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00(2) The amount of dialogue that is going on right now,
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