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FlagofFreedom Posted 20 years ago
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More amazing still
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More amazing still, he saw there a girl whose charm reminded him of Mary, and whose grace reminded him of Diana.
More amazing still, he saw there a girl whose charm reminded him of Mary, and whose grace reminded him of Diana.
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Just lose the comma after Mary . Still is perhaps redundant, depending on the preceding text.
- Just lose the comma after Mary .
- Still is perhaps redundant, depending on the preceding text.
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Just lose the comma after Mary. Still is perhaps redundant, depending on the preceding text.
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Could I rewrite "and whose grace reminded him of Diana" as "her grace of Diana?"
That is, I hope:
More amazing still, he saw there a girl whose charm reminded him of Mary, and whose grace reminded him of Diana = More amazing still, he saw there a girl whose charm reminded him of Mary, her grace of Diana.
Are the two sentences equal?
That is, I hope:
More amazing still, he saw there a girl whose charm reminded him of Mary, and whose grace reminded him of Diana = More amazing still, he saw there a girl whose charm reminded him of Mary, her grace of Diana.
Are the two sentences equal?
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No, your second sentence has thrown off the parallelism and lost the connection...and the sentence structure. Even this-- More amazing still, he saw there a girl whose charm reminded him of Mary, whose grace of Diana-- is overstretching the elliptical ability of the language, in my opinion.
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