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Kenspear Posted 19 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Mistakes in this feature writing?

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00 I've written this feature hoping it would get published in my school's magazine. However, english isn't my first language and so there could be a lot of mistakes that I couldn't spot in the article.02br
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00 I would be grateful if you could help me out to look for any possible mistakes. Thanks a lot! 05002br
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01b00YOUNG and with an enterprising mind02b02br
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00UM student makes it big in tuition industry02br
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00 Tuition has become so much of a necessity amongst school children that tuition centers in our country are mushrooming like never before. A decade or two ago, tuition teachers who made thousands of ringgit monthly were not only an uncommon sight in the society, but they were also respectable people perceived as having a good profession.02br
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00 However, in this era of information society, age is definitely not a hindrance anymore as just anyone could make it big in the tuition industry if they have the knowledge and the skills in teaching. At least 20-year-old Lee Khoon could prove that right by taking the next big move in his early career to register the 01i00T Square Tuition Centre02i00 he and his partner have co-run for a while at Damansara Utama.02br
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00Lee, who is currently a second-semester student of Universiti Malaya 05100, has had four years of teaching experience. Prior to setting up the01i00T Square02i00, Lee used to conduct tuition classes at home, which he eventually found it too crammed as the number of students expanded.02br
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00 “Therefore the purpose of setting up the 01i00T Square 02i00is to provide more space for tuition classes,” Lee explained. “I might have been driven by the money factor when I first conducted tuition classes, but after sometime, I got to realize that teaching could be fun and enjoyable.”02br
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00 In fact the 01i00T Square02i00—a joint venture between Lee himself and another senior lecturer of UM—has been run for virtually a year now, but they only chose to register their tuition centre in January 2007 because they couldn’t afforded to be taxed yet prior to that. At least not before things were settled down.02br
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00 Now pursuing a Bachelor of Science in Mathematics, Lee said an organized schedule is vital to him than ever before as he has to divide his time well between studying, getting involved in co-curricular activities, and teaching. “I’ve already cut down the number of classes I’m teaching this year so that I won’t get too hectic like last year,” he said.02br
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00 As of now, the 01i00T Square02i00 has approximately 250 students altogether—all of secondary level, and 15 part-time tuition teachers. Having only five to ten students for each and every tuition session is certainly an advantageous factor for both the teachers and students of the centre because it doesn’t only make the class easier to handle, but most importantly students are given optimum attention and lecture.02br
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00 When asked whether the weaker students would affect the learning progress of the rest of the class, Lee said he actually has two classes for every subject he is teaching: one for the weaker students and the other for the advanced.02br
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00 “The weaker students are naturally slow in learning—therefore it would be easier to provide them with model questions so that they get familiarized with the format,” Lee said, adding that he would at times challenge his students to solve questions by offering prizes as a form of encouragement and motivation.02br
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00 On the other hand, advanced students of the other class enjoy the privilege of getting extra if not more detailed explanations from Lee as they are able to understand and cope with new information at a faster pace. As a result, Lee has to prepare more questions for these students, who always ask for more!02br
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00 However, practically every teacher would be thronged with the common problem of having to deal with disobedient and noisy students. As for Lee, he would usually ask them to “either to keep quiet or leave the class.” He thinks that there is no point to have to lecture or scold these students because they, as young adults, should have been matured enough to behave themselves.02br
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00 With the efforts Lee and his partner have put into operating the 01i00T Square02i00, it seems that Lee now enjoys a hefty sum of income. No—he doesn’t have to depend on his parents anymore to pay for his daily expenses; he forks out his hard-earned money instead and pays for himself.02br
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00 With the money he earns, Lee has traveled to quite a number of places including Taiwan, Hong Kong, Mascow, Thailand, Brunei, and Singapore. And if you think Lee Khoon isn’t special, well, he is only 20. 030src#f1.gifw59811id30
  

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0 I suggest you cut short the bit about the "tuition industry" so you can introduce Lee in your first paragraph. ) 0-

  • 0 I suggest you cut short the bit about the "tuition industry" so you can introduce Lee in your first paragraph.
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0 I suggest you cut short the bit about the "tuition industry" so you can introduce Lee in your first paragraph. (Or you can provide more background on the industry later.) 0-

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