Mistakes in the English version of this web page?

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HelloI need to know if there are grammar, spelling and/or ortographic mistakes in a web page I made. My first language is not English (in fact it´s not the second one either) and I´m afraid there are.Is there anyone here who can have a look of it and check it?www.inflexart.comthank you

Doctor D · Accepted Answer

Here are my suggestions/corrections. (Going from top to bottom.)

Running text at top: you have "colaborate" instead of "collaborate."

Second paragraph:
I would say "low cost downloads (delete "files")
Write the cost as "$.80"
Replace "and" with "as well as" (for free online promotion...)

Fourth paragraph:
I would say "download a group of files" (not "download groups of several files") and add a comma before "instead of..."

Sixth paragraph:
(Reworded) If you have any questions, email us at Email Removed

OUR PRODUCTS
Add verbs so all sentences are similar.
If you want to watch and/or download interesting video files, go to http://www.inflexart.com/fotography.html
If you want to have a look at or download printable jpg graphic designs or photos, go to http://www.inflexart.com/design.html

(Reworded)
Inflexart.com is designed as a space where fundamental principles such as artistic creativity and freedom of imagination are valued. It is a space open to anyone with intellectual concerns and also a place that everyone can embrace, contributing their opinions on issues that concern us all.

CHART
Videos -- You say "documentals" but I think you mean "documentaries."

CLOSING
(Reworded)
All the content on this web page is placed according to the language it uses. Content without text is matched to the background of its author or, if that does not apply, is placed on the English portion of our website.

Finally, you have CONTACTO but clearly mean CONTACT

I hope this is helpful. If you have any questions, let me know.

Ruben Feijoo Alonso · Answer

Hello
Thank you very much.
I have already updated the old version and replaced it for a new one that incorporates all your suggestions.
Let me know if you want to promote your web page or your books on our web page once we finish it

Do you think there are no mistakes at Upload and Read the terms of use? It would be unbelievable since most of the paragraphs there were taken almost as they are from Google translator.
Cheers

Doctor D · Answer

Okay, here are my suggestions for changes in Terms of Use. Changes/replacements are in bold; deletions are crossed out.

inflexart.com is a website for uploading and downloading digital content, as well as for online promotion of artistic events in certain geographical areas.
We do not advertise or promote events or content that includes obscene, racist, xenophobic or sexist material, or that results, for any other reason, in discrimination towards any person or groups of people, or that promotes ~~and that make apology of~~ idiocy or lawlessness in any form.
If you send us content, by pressing the submit button you agree with these conditions.
inflexart.com may make technical improvements in the content received to suit the style ~~line~~ [?] of the page. This includes remasters, graphic equalizers, spelling and grammar corrections ... to be carried by persons qualified in the fields to which they apply.
If you send us your content and we publish it, we have no obligation to update or to remove it and the responsibility for any update or removal shall be borne by the website [This is contradictory--does the website claim or disavow the responsibility for revision?]. inflexart.com only publishes original content. This means that the liability in regard to copyright of any content that is sent to us[,] rests on the person or persons who sent it to us.
This website uses digital online payment systems. If you send us your content and we publish it, every time someone buys one of your files, inflexart.com will pay you 50% of the value we receive for each download by the payment platform. This means that if the person making the purchase pays $ 0.80 per discharge and the company that manages the payment [,] deducts, for example, $ 0.30 for every payment, inflexart.com will pay you 0.80-0.30 / 2 = $ 0.25 per download.
The website shall periodically and publicly, through a computer marker that shows the number of times each button has been pushed online, count how many discharges ~~has had~~ each item has had, so that anyone posting any content on inflexart.com can be sure that the amounts received periodically, as appropriate, are consistent with ~~those derived from~~ the number of downloads of his published works.
The website will send an email to each of its users showing at least 15 days in advance what the place and time of ~~which will hold~~ these public hearings will be.
Payments ~~that come~~ to those whose contents have been downloaded ~~resulted in discharges~~ will be periodic and will take place within ~~less than~~ two weeks ~~after each~~ of these counts, unless any of the billing platforms impound ~~withhold~~ funds for a certain period of time, in which case payment could be delayed a maximum of six months.
If you decide to ~~you~~ send your files and publish them, you should provide a system so that we can send any amounts due ~~the amount that corresponds with you~~ free of charge (bank account in Spain, Portugal, UK, France and USA), PayPal, Google Checkout account... or some other appropriate free system.

Ruben Feijoo Alonso · Answer

thank you
we are really grateful
We well update the terms of use in a while
If there is something we can do for you, let us know

Ruben Feijoo Alonso · Answer

Hi
I have already updated it at the server
Although it must be hard to believe taking account the number of mistakes I made in the original translation, a lot of people told me in the UK that my English level (at least the spoken one and my listening) is really high for a Spanish speaking person. In fact I hold a diploma at a British College in Music Technology. Now, imagine how it would be if I had a low level he he he
I think that the main reason why my spoken English is better than my written one, is that the ones who taught English to me, where people who used a lot of slang from the south of England instead of proper English.
Thank u very much

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