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Ben9108 Posted 20 years ago
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The following paragraph is a part of my application letter. It has been commented by two interviewers. Up to this moment, i cannot find the problem from where. Have anyone help me?
"For the whole, I enclosed herewith my resume for your kind consideration and I hope my solid experience would properly help myself to develop my career in this field. I would like to success your business if future great cooperation can be achieved. I look forward to being granted an interview, when I shall be glad to explain myself to you more detail. "
"For the whole, I enclosed herewith my resume for your kind consideration and I hope my solid experience would properly help myself to develop my career in this field. I would like to success your business if future great cooperation can be achieved. I look forward to being granted an interview, when I shall be glad to explain myself to you more detail. "
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For the whole, I enclosed herewith my resume for your kind consideration and I hope my solid experience would properly help myself to develop my career in this field. Suggestion: Herewith I have enclosed my resume for your kind consideration and hope my solid experience will enable me to further develop my career in this field. -For the whole is not needed.
- For the whole, I enclosed herewith my resume for your kind consideration and I hope my solid experience would properly help myself to develop my career in this field.
- Suggestion: Herewith I have enclosed my resume for your kind consideration and hope my solid experience will enable me to further develop my career in this field.
- -For the whole is not needed.
- not would.
- -Better to say further develop since you are saying you already have experience.
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For the whole, I enclosed herewith my resume for your kind consideration and I hope my solid experience would properly help myself to develop my career in this field.
Suggestion: Herewith I have enclosed my resume for your kind consideration and hope my solid experience will enable me to further develop my career in this field.
-For the whol
Suggestion: Herewith I have enclosed my resume for your kind consideration and hope my solid experience will enable me to further develop my career in this field.
-For the whol
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