Melts writing task 1

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The chart below shows the percentage of female members of parliament in 5 European countries from 2000 to 2012

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The line graph illustrates the proportion of parliament’s women in different countries from Europe between 2000 and 2012. It is evident that all nations saw a growth in the percentage of female member through period except Belgium.

Starting from approximately 27% in 2000, the percentage of Italian female member steadily increased to over 30% before exceeding that of Germany and reached the highest point at nearly 40% in 2012. In addition, a similar trend was recorded in both the proportion of Germany and France female member, sustained grew to over 35% and approximately 30% respectively in 2012.

Moreover, there was a dramatical growth in the percentage of female member of UK parliament from under 5% in 2000 to nearly 25% in the end of the period. However, that of Belgium witnessed a decline from 2008 to 2012 after increasing significantly to almost 25%.

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The line graph illustrates the proportion of parliament’s women (incorrect English) in different countries from Europe between 2000 and 2012. ~~It is evident that~~ ("clear / obvious / evident " are opinion words. Do not write opinions in task 1.) all nations (All nations such as Spain, Portugal, Denmark, Poland and Luxembourg? ) saw (Avoid anthropomorphic verbs like "see," "experience" and "witness" in task 1.) a growth in the percentage of female member (wrong form) through (missing word) period except Belgium. (incorrect. The percentage there increased also.)

Starting from approximately 27% in 2000, the percentage of Italian female (incorrect usage) member (wrong form) steadily increased to over 30% before exceeding that of Germany and reached the highest point at nearly 40% in 2012. In addition, a similar trend was recorded in both the proportion of Germany and France female member, (wrong form) sustained (wrong word) grew to over 35% and approximately 30% respectively in 2012.

Moreover, there was a dramatical (wrong form) growth in the percentage of female member (wrong form) of UK parliament from under 5% in 2000 to nearly 25% in the end of the period. However, that of Belgium witnessed a decline from 2008 to 2012 after increasing significantly to almost 25%.

Model essay for you to study:

The line graph shows the increase in the proportion of women in the parliaments of five European countries (the UK, Italy, Germany, Belgium and France) during the twelve-year period from 2000 to 2012. The values on the graph ranged from a low of 3% (the UK in 2000) to a high of 38% (Italy in 2012).

At the start in 2000, Germany had the highest percentage of women in their parliament, at 33%, followed by Italy (26%), France (25%), Belgium (17%) and the UK (3%). In 2012, the order was the same except Italy had overtaken Germany 38% to 36%, and Belgium was tied with the UK at 23%.

Although the trends were positive, the shape of the curves differed. The best fit for all the curves with the exception of Belgium was linear, with the UK having the highest growth rate, adding about 20% and Germany having the lowest rate, adding only 2% over the period. In Belgium, the percentage grew to 24% in 2008, but then declined by 1% in the last four years.

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