Please could someone help me...

I really want to be accepted to this master and my motivation letter has to be perfect and I'm not!...so please help me! help me!!(singing)!

that's my motivation letter:

Dear Sir/ Madame,

I am graduated in Foreign Language and Literature at the University **.

I am writing this letter to apply for admission to Master in **.

From your university website, I learnt about this master’s programme, and I am very interested in it.

This programme will give me the opportunity to link my past education, languages, with new studies in the economic field, of which I have had some direct experiences in my familiar furniture’s company. When attending High School, in summer periods, I worked in this company covering different places: I worked as a factory worker and as an office worker in the international office. Right now I’m participating to all directional meetings as a secretary.

This master would be a big step in my career because it would help me to obtain managerial know-how, effective awareness of administrative work, the methodology of research and consultancy and it would prepare me to carry out a project work on internationalisation that would give me more useful attainments in order to assist me in supporting the continuing international development of this company. Skimming the courses’ catalogue, available on internet, I have found many interesting courses that would suit my field of interest, such as “Human resource management”, “International business management”, “International marketing”, “Technical negotiation and cross cultural management” and “International brand management” to namely only a few, would be very intriguing.

To achieve my future goals I need a good preparation in all these matters, and this master programme is the right one in order to realize my aspirations. In addition being accepted to this programme I would have the opportunity to study not only in a great Institute such as the University of ** and its Schools of Economics and Management of ** and **, but also in France, in the prestigious academic institution of ** Business School. Based on the reputation of these institutions, their teaching resources and studying environment, I consider these schools my best choice for studying and meet new friends, also from different countries. In addition in France I could deepen the knowledge of the French language that I have already studied and have practiced abroad. In fact I have had many international experiences, as tourist and as a student, for language courses in England, France and USA. These experiences have given me the opportunity to become a minded open person. The most important experience abroad was to be an Erasmus student in Denmark where I spent eight months during my University career. This experience was very important for my academic and personal growth. At the beginning it was very difficult to live in a completely different and so cold country, but now I consider this experience one of the most important of my life. Living in a Danish family has given me the chance to know and understand a new interesting way of life, so different from the Italian one, but at the same time so fascinating. Also the academic courses, all taught in English, show me new manners to learn. This experience gave me the opportunity to know and understand other and different cultures from all over the world making me a richer person.

I consider myself curious intuitive and adventurous. I am a determinate person who always fights hard to achieve her goals, always respecting other people. I am independent and calm under pressure and have good interpersonal skills. I am able to adapt to a constantly changing work and study environment and to maintain a good relationship with individuals also from different cultures and backgrounds. I like also team work: I strengthen the ability of working in a team group when developing my thesis of the bachelor’s degree. I worked as a researcher recording a bilingual child (Italian/Spanish) of two years old in a naturalistic way, and the after gathering and transcribing each registration in a computer format available on a database in internet, I analyzed this data.

Working in the last part of this programme I have had the opportunity to work in a team group for realizing a wider project on bilingualism. To realize this project I also collaborate to write an article that soon will be published. This experience gave me the opportunity to work in a team group, to make a practical work and to become keener with the use of internet and Office tools.

Even though I have a varied background of studies and experiences, now I really want to deepen on the economic field, in particular in the internationalisation of company. This master programme would give me the right preparation to enter in the working world with a good and deep knowledge.

I am sure that I would well master this graduate programme as I was always a hard- working student and I was always successful on my aims. I am highly motivated to attend this master and I am sure that this motivation would help me to succeed.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely

***