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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category or exports in 2016 compared with 2015.essay hereThe given bar chart reveals the valuable exports of a nation in different sectors between 2015 and 2016, while the table depicts the change in the percentage of each category of transports from the same year 2015 and 2016.Overall, it can be clearly seen that the smallest percentage change was the gems and jewelry, while both petroleum products and engineered goods had the highest percentage of the export income in 2016.As we can see, petrol products climbed slightly from high above 60 to 62 billion dollars and went up to 3% from 2015 to 2016. Goods in engineering saw a moderate change from 58 to well above 60 billion at 8,5% between 2015 and 2016. Gems and jewelry experienced a slight downturn at 5,18% and from 42 to about 40 billion dollars. Agricultural products grew to a small 0,81%, followed by textiles, which increased slightly from about 30 to well above 30 billion dollars and the percentage was 15,24% between 2015 and 2016.

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The ~~given~~ bar chart reveals (not a good word choice) the ~~valuable~~ exports (That is not accurate. What is the y-axis scale?) of a nation in different (How many? What are they?) sectors (wrong word) between 2015 and 2016, while the table depicts the change in the percentage of each category of transports (wrong word) from the same year (wrong expression. "the same year" is one year. You listed two, not one) 2015 and 2016.

Overall, ~~it can be clearly seen that~~ (Delete. Read my advice) the ~~smallest percentage change was the gems and jewelry,~~ (incorrect) gems and jewellery was the only category that decreased, while both petroleum products and engineered goods had the highest ~~percentage of the~~ (The bar chart does not plot percentages.) export income in 2016.

~~As we can see,~~ (Delete. Read my advice) petrol products climbed slightly from high above 60 (Not a good expression) to 62 billion dollars and went up to 3% ~~from 2015 to 2016~~. (DO not keep repeating what you explained in the first paragraph.) Goods in engineering (wrong expression) ~~saw~~ (wrong word. Read my advice) a moderate change from 58 to well above 60 billion (80 billion is well above 60, and so is 92. Be specific) , an increase of at 8,5% ~~between 2015 and 2016~~. Gems and jewelry had ~~experienced~~ (wrong word. Read my advice) a slight decline of ~~downturn~~ at 5,18%, ~~and~~ from 42 to about 40 billion dollars. Agricultural products grew ~~to a small~~ by 0,81%, followed by textiles, which increased slightly from about 30 to well above 30 billion dollars (43 is well above 30 and so is 56. Be precise) ~~and the~~ a percentage change of ~~was~~ 15,24% ~~between 2015 and 2016.~~

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The bar graph gives the export value of five categories of goods (petroleum goods, engineered goods, gems and jewellery, agricultural products, and textiles) for a country in 2015 and 2016. The table lists the year-over-year percentage changes calculated from the numbers given in the bar graph.

Overall, in 2015, the category with the highest value was petroleum products, followed by engineered goods, jewellery, agricultural products and textiles. The order in 2016 was the same, except textiles had the same value as agricultural products. All categories showed gains, except for jewellery.

In detail, petroleum products combined with engineered goods, was valued at $110 and $113 billion in 2015 and 2016. Petroleum products edged out engineered goods by $5 billion in 2015 but the difference decreased to $2 billion in 2016. That was due to the 8.5% increase in engineered goods compared to only 3% for petroleum. Gems and jewellry, the only category that had a decline, were valued at $43 and $40 billion respectively. Agricultural products at $30-$31 billion changed the least, and textiles had the largest relative change, going up from $26 to $32 billion.

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