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The given pie charts reveal the average percentages in specific meals of three different kinds of nutrients such as sodium, saturated fat, and sugar of US people which are not healthy if consumed a large amount of it.

Overall, it can be clearly seen that sodium dinner has the highest nutritional value in meals, while the percentage of sodium in breakfast is the lowest.

As we can see, dinner with sodium made up 43% while the percentage of saturated fat food and sugary food accounted for 37% and 23% respectively. Also, a modest 29% is sodium lunch, while saturated fat in lunch is 26% and sugar in lunch is 19%.

However, there is a modest 16% in both breakfast including fat and sugar, whereas a mere 14% of sodium is consumed in breakfast. A hefty 42% of sugar is used in snacks, while sodium and saturated fat in snacks only constituted 14% and 21% in both categories respectively.

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The ~~given~~ (How many?) pie charts reveal (poor word choice) the ~~average~~ percentages ~~in specific meals~~ (wrong placement) of three different kinds of nutrients ~~such a~~s (wrong expression. "Such as" means the list is incomplete and you are only giving a few examples.) sodium, saturated fat, and sugar in specific meals (which meals? how many?) of US people which are not healthy if consumed a large amount of it. (ungrammatical)

Overall, ~~it can be clearly seen that~~ (delete. Read my advice) sodium dinner (wrong expression) has the highest nutritional value (These elements are not healthy, so "highest nutritional value" does not make sense.) in meals, while the percentage of sodium in breakfast is the lowest. (incorrect, it is the same percentage as in snacks)

~~As we can see,~~ dinner with sodium (That makes no sense. ) made up 43% while the percentage of saturated fat food and sugary food accounted for 37% and 23% respectively. Also, a modest 29% is sodium lunch, (wrong expression) while saturated fat in lunch is 26% and sugar in lunch is 19%.

However, there is a modest 16% in both breakfast including fat and sugar, (That makes no sense) whereas a mere 14% of sodium is consumed in breakfast. A ~~hefty~~ 42% of sugar is used in snacks, while sodium and saturated fat in snacks only constituted 14% and 21% in both categories respectively.

This task is very difficult. You did not explain the information very well. I could not comprehend what you were saying.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Here are different ways to describe the figure in an opening paragraph.

1.

Three pie charts, one each for sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar, break down the percentage of that nutrient that is consumed, on average, in each of the four daily meals. This data is from the average American diet which consists of breakfast, lunch, dinner, and in-between meal snacks.

2.

The first pie chart divides the daily average consumption of sodium over four meals in a typical American diet: breakfast, lunch, dinner and snacks.  The second and third pie charts show the data for saturated fat and added sugars.

3.

The three pie charts present data on eating habits of Americans, who have four meals per day: breakfast, lunch, dinner and snacks. The first gives the percentage of sodium consumed in each of these meals. The second shows saturated fat, and the third, added sugars.

4.

The three pie charts, one each for sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar, depict the proportion of daily intake of these nutrients distributed over four meals, breakfast, lunch, dinner and snacks. The data is from the US.

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