Many university students live with their families, while others live away from home because their universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages both situations ?

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Some undergraduates live with their families, while others can’t live at their houses due to the locations of their campuses. The pros and cons of this issue have been debated upon. And this essay will highlight both.

There are some advantages of living far from home. Firstly, it helps them to learn how to manage their life. In other words, it's not like when they live with their families, they need to learn how to manage their living expenses as well as their study expenses properly and sometimes they also have to work part-time to earn money. Students who live away from home have to learn how to solve many problems without the help of their parents, which makes them more knowledgeable about life as well as improves their life skills than when they lived with their families, they have to learn how to prepare their meals, how to fix faucet (etc.). Secondly, unlike when they study close to home and stay with family, they can do what they want when they live away from home. For example, they can hang out with their friends without their parent's permission like before going to college, they can have a bath late without being urged by their parents and so on.

Despite the advantages above, I think the main disadvantage is having to find accommodation. Universities are often located in major urban centers, where rents are high if students have to find a room with even the basic facilities. However, there are benefits of learning to study independently in another place. They need to get used to the new environment and meet new people with many personalities and they can also have conflicts with people who don't have the same personality. In addition, because they live far from home, they are not controlled by their parents, so some students focus on other things like going out, having a love relationship and neglecting their studies.

In conclusion, there are both positive and negative impacts on university students residing distant from home.

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You wrote about 340 words. The minimum is 250. You will not lose points for writing more; however, longer essays generally do not get high band scores. And there are many reasons for this.

First, the longer the essay, the more chances you have to make errors, and you will lose points for each of those errors.

Second, your writing may be repetitious and wordy. This will cost you points in task response or coherence and cohesion.

Third, you will likely stray off-topic, and examiners will deduct points if you are not focused on the topic. Do not write about things that are not specifically given in the task. You will also be tempted to use weak or unsound arguments or even lose your direction and contradict yourself. Develop just two or three argument points with examples and personal experiences. It is much better to have two well-developed and fleshed-out argument points than to have four which are just individual separate statements.

Fourth, you will spend a lot of time writing, and not have sufficient time left over to proofread your essay. You will miss the silly mistakes, which everyone makes, and that lowers your score.

Fifth, pity the examiners who have to read all the IELTS essays individually. There are hundreds of them. If they read your long essay when they are tired at the end of the day, they will score extra hard and not be very generous when scoring.

Sixth, you will not have enough time for Task 1, and get a lower score there. You should allow 40 minutes for task and 20 minutes for Task 1. The word counts are designed so that you have ample time for brainstorming and then writing the two parts.

Aim to write 270-290 words for Task 2. Practice writing a lot of essays so you get a feeling for the length.
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Some undergraduates live with their families, while others can’t (Do not use contractions in formal writing.) live at their houses due to the locations of their campuses. (Delete these sentences. They do nothing for your essay.) ~~The pros and cons of this issue have been debated upon. And this essay will highlight both.~~

Example opening. This avoids mentioning "controversy" or "debate" or what your essay is about. Start the essay with a general introduction which convinces the examiner that you understand the task. Just repeating the task with substituted synonyms is not the best strategy.

When young people graduate from high school, many continue on to tertiary education. Some choose a school located far away, so they have to move and live in accommodation near campus. Others choose one within commuting distance, and they can live with their parents while studying. There are pros and cons associated with each choice, which should be taken into consideration before making a final decision about where to study.

There are some advantages of living far from home. First, ~~Firstly~~, it helps them (who? There is no antecedent for this pronoun.) to learn how to manage their life. In other words, it's (Do not use contractions in formal writing.) not ~~like~~ the same as when they live with their families, (Comma splice error. Ungrammatical. ) they need to learn how to manage their living expenses as well as their study expenses properly and sometimes they also have to work part-time to earn money. (Your sentence is too long-winded. It is a run-on sentence. If you write long sentences, make sure they are correctly structured.) Students who live away from home have to learn how to solve many problems without the help of their parents, which makes them more knowledgeable about life as well as improves their life skills than when they lived (You have lost control of the sentence structure. It is not a grammatical sentence.) with their families, (Comma splice error. Ungrammatical. ) they have to learn how to prepare their meals, how to fix a faucet (etc.). (Do not use ellipses - "..." - or "etc." or phrases such as "and so on." It shows incomplete ideas. It is bad for the sentence structure. Make complete thoughts and ideas.) ~~Secondly~~, Second, unlike when they study close to home and stay with family, they can do what they want when they live away from home. For example, they can hang out with their friends without their parent's permission like (wrong usage) before going to college, (This says the opposite of what you intended.) they can have a bath late without being urged by their parents and so on. (Do not use "and so on".)

Despite the advantages above, I think the main disadvantage is having to find accommodation. Universities are often located in major urban centers, where rents are high if students have to find a room with even the basic facilities. (You just lost a lot of points for coherence. This paragraph is about "disadvantages." You changed the topic after two sentences, and started writing about the opposite idea. Then you switch topics again. ) However, there are benefits of learning to study independently in another place. They need to get used to the new environment and meet new people (That seems like a benefit. You were writing about the problems) with many personalities and they can also have conflicts with people who don't have the same personality. In addition, because they live far from home, they are not controlled by their parents, so some students focus on other things like going out, having a love relationship and neglecting their studies.

In conclusion, there are both positive and negative impacts on university students residing distant from home.

You did not adequately respond to the task. The task was to write about the advantages and disadvantages of each of two options. The essay did not do this in a clear way. The writing was mostly about living away from home, which is only one of the two.

The sentences are long and ungainly. There is a lot of repetition.
Many are ungrammatical because of the comma splice errors.

Read this resource about comma splice errors and how to avoid them.

https://chompchomp.com/terms/commasplice.htm

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