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Green guava 50 Posted 5 years ago
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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

The use of sugar on food and drink is a hotly-debated topic that often divides opinion in these days that high levels of this spice can bring a certain number of problems for health that sugary products need to increase price to encourage people to consume less sugar . To a certain extent , I agree that it may be true in the case of some societies . However , I also believe that others seem to be unaffected by this perspective .


On the one hand , sugar is one of the spices that create a delicious food or drink so in fact we are not able to eat without sugar. This means that eating numerous foods which are so sweet not good for our health might have led to some illness . For instance , increasing levels of sugar in blood can lead to obesity and diabetes , moreover , it can become dangerous to our life if people remain this bad habit . Therefore , it is a great idea that if the community desire to avoid some risk about consuming a good deal of sugar , manufacturers should alter the price to become costly .


On the other hand , there are a variety of reasons why I believe that it has some drawbacks if sugary goods do that . Firstly , sugar is really crucial in our diet , therefore making this spice more expensive will influence not only our style but some people who are not wealth also would not be able to buy the food for them . Just think for example to poor people who can maybe afford a few loads of bread per day .


In conclusion , the best things to tackled with this issues that informing inhabitant about what they eat such as raise awareness about read ingredients in the list or conscious to know function of labels and moderation amount of sugar we eat instead grow the prices .

  

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green guava 50The use of sugar on food and drink is a hotly-debated topic that often divides opinion in these days that high levels of this spice can bring a certain number of problems

There is not hot debate. Do not use a memorized task response. "Spice" is incorrect.

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Most of your sentences are ungrammatical. You need to practice writing sentences. Writing correct verb forms is your weakest skill. Another weak skill is complex sentences.

You need to study vocabulary, since many words are incorrect.

Your thesis (partly agree) was not continued in the body paragraphs, so your essay has poor coherence and cohesion. You did not mention the societie

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