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Anonymous Posted 11 years ago
Grammar
Management-speak
A recent management memo contained the following sentence:
"xxx has been investigating the optimum organisational model for student administration."
To avoid the logical impossibility of finding THE optimum model from among the infinite number of possible models, I would have edited it as follows:
"xxx has been developing an organisational model for student administration"
I also feel there is something wrong with the grammar in the original sentence, but can't put my finger on it. I would be grateful if someone would offer a critique, or praise for that matter.
Best wishes, Robert Reid.
"xxx has been investigating the optimum organisational model for student administration."
To avoid the logical impossibility of finding THE optimum model from among the infinite number of possible models, I would have edited it as follows:
"xxx has been developing an organisational model for student administration"
I also feel there is something wrong with the grammar in the original sentence, but can't put my finger on it. I would be grateful if someone would offer a critique, or praise for that matter.
Best wishes, Robert Reid.
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I see nothing illogical or ungrammatical about the original, though I agree that it is mgmtspeak. I suggest that the adjective 'optimal' is a better choice, however.
- I see nothing illogical or ungrammatical about the original, though I agree that it is mgmtspeak.
- I suggest that the adjective 'optimal' is a better choice, however.
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I see nothing illogical or ungrammatical about the original, though I agree that it is mgmtspeak. I suggest that the adjective 'optimal' is a better choice, however.
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