Making Marmalade.

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Here is an essay about how to make a marmalade.

If the full mark is 30, how would you give me?.

Making marmalade is just as easy as ABC. Moreover, this kind of dishes helps us to save time. It just need a couple of steps then it will be done and we can use it whenever we want to.

First, you need to choose a good quality of oranges. I would prefer you the Australian naval oranges since they are well known in producing great oranges. It is important to choose oranges with a good quality because I am very sure that you will not want your marmalade expires quite very soon. Before you go to the next step, wash the oranges thoroughly with water to remove all traces of dirt.

Secondly, peel the skin by using a peeler then cut them into long, thin rinds and do not forget to remove the seeds. After you have done all these, squeeze the juice into a bowl. You may use a pair of gloves as you know those oranges are acidic and may hurt your skin.

Thirdly, mix the juice and the peels with white sugar according to taste. If you do not want it to be so sweet then just add less sugar. It is up to you. After that, place the mixture into a pot and cook it under a slow heat.

After a few minutes, add a spoon of pectin to thicken the mixture and leave it cool. Then pour the jam into pre-strelised container and seal the mouth and now we are one step left to make a marmalade. Refrigerate it for one night and it will last for several months.

*please highlight all the grammar mistakes and correct it for me

KrisBlueNZ · Accepted Answer

Yayya LautnerMaking marmalade is just as easy as ABC.

This might be considered a bit childish, especially with JUST in there. I suggest removing the JUST.

Yayya LautnerMoreover, this kind of dishes helps us to save time.

Singular/plural mismatch here - THIS kind of DISH or THESE kinds of DISHES.

Perhaps better to say "Dishes of this kind help us to save time". Really what helps us to save time is BEING FAMILIAR with dishes of this kind, but my suggestion is OK. You could reword like "You can save a lot of time by knowing simple, quick recipes like this" or something like that.

Yayya Lautner"It just need a couple of steps

It just NEEDS. The subject of the sentence, IT, is singular, so you use NEEDS. If the subject was plural, such as THEY, you would use NEED.

NEEDS is the wrong word anyway. With STEPS, the usual verb is TAKE, i.e. TAKE STEPS. "Yes sir, I will TAKE STEPS to ensure that this never happens again". If you need to TAKE two STEPS in this recipe, then the recipe "just TAKES TWO STEPS".

Yayya Lautnerthen it will be done

That bit seems redundant

Yayya Lautnerand we can use it whenever we want to.
First, you need to choose a good quality of oranges.

You can't say "a good quality of oranges". Simplest replacement is "good quality oranges". You could also say "a good quality VARIETY of oranges", where VARIETY means the stock variant, like Braeburn, Granny Smith, etc for apples. I think that's what you want to say, but "good quality oranges" implies that, to some extent.

Yayya LautnerI would prefer you the Australian naval oranges

"I would prefer you the" is wrong. PREFER refers to what YOU like. You can say "I PREFER Australian navel oranges", which tells us about what YOU prefer, or you could say "I RECOMMEND Australian navel oranges", which means you are advocating Australian navel oranges, i.e. you are telling the reader that you think they should buy that type of orange, i.e. it's a RECOMMENDATION or ENDORSEMENT, from you, for those oranges.

Also, it's NAVEL not NAVAL. NAVAL refers to the Navy, i.e. sea-based armed forces. NAVEL is another name for tummy button, and the funny-shaped bit at the bottom of a navel orange looks a bit like a tummy button, hence the name!

Yayya Lautnersince they are well known in producing great oranges.

Who or what is THEY in that sentence? This sentence continues on from a sentence that's talking about Australian navel oranges, but you say THEY are well-known for producing great oranges, which refers to the Australians, not the oranges. You could say "since Australians are well known for producing great oranges". It's the word THEY that's the problem; THEY refers to the subject of the previous sentence, which was ORANGES, not Australians. "Australian" and "navel" act as modifiers to ORANGES, but the ORANGES themselves are still the subject.

Also, "well known in" should be "well known FOR". You can say "The Joneses are well known IN this neighborhood", but if the people are well known BECAUSE of something they DO, they are "well known FOR", e.g. "The Swiss are well known for making cheeses".

Yayya LautnerIt is important to choose oranges with a good quality because I am very sure that you will not want your marmalade expires quite very soon.

1. "quite very soon" is not proper English. QUITE and VERY mean conflicting things and can't be used like that, except as linguistic humour. I'm going to replace it with "too soon".

2. "will not want" ("won't want") should be DO NOT WANT, or DON'T WANT. The difference between WON'T and DON'T is that DON'T refers to NOW, while WON'T refers to the future. True, if the marmalade expires, that will happen in the future, but your wish (marmalade that won't expire too soon) is NOW. Therefore you use DON'T (or DO NOT), not WON'T (WILL NOT).

3. "you don't want your marmalade EXPIRES too soon" has a problem. It's obvious what you mean, but you need to restructure that sentence.

A. You can't WANT something EXPIRES. You can WANT something TO EXPIRE, so you could say "you will not want your marmalade TO EXPIRE too soon"

B. You can want something (marmalade) THAT WILL expire too soon, so you could say "you don't want marmalade THAT WILL expire too soon", meaning that "marmalade that will expire too soon" is a thing, and you don't want it.

Either A or B is fine.

Yayya LautnerBefore you go to the next step, wash the oranges thoroughly with water to remove all traces of dirt.

"Before you go to the next step," is very wordy. I'd say "Before you start,"

Yayya LautnerSecondly, peel the skin by using a peeler

BY USING is not appropriate here, and BY should be removed: "peel the skin USING a peeler". The word BY is used when you are going to describe HOW the action is done. When the action is simply to use a peeler, in the normal way that a peeler is used, you're not explaining HOW to do the action, since that's obvious to anyone who's used a peeler before. So BY is redundant, and unnatural to me, in the case where it's followed by USING without any more details on how the thing is to be used.

There should be a comma after PEELER.

Yayya Lautnerthen cut them into long, thin rinds and do not forget to remove the seeds.

1. What is THEM? The subject of the previous sentence is SKIN. You should have said "Peel the ORANGES using a peeler," so the subject would match this sentence. That makes more sense anyway, since the ORANGES are the thing you're interested in. The skins have gone.

2. "long, thin rinds" - I don't know what you mean by that; maybe RIND is the wrong word?

3. "do not forget to" - you can change that to "don't forget to", or my preference, "remember to" :-)

Yayya LautnerAfter you have done all these,

THESE needs a noun. You could say "After you have done all these things", or "After you have taken all these steps", or you can replace those six words with one word: THEN.

Yayya Lautnersqueeze the juice into a bowl.
You may use a pair of gloves as you know those oranges are acidic and may hurt your skin.
Remove YOU KNOW. If the reader already knows the oranges are acidic, then he/she will already know to wear gloves; you don't need to tell him/her. Alternatively, there are several ways to reorganise that sentence.
Yayya LautnerThirdly, mix the juice and the peels with white sugar according to taste.
PEELS is not normally used. When you peel fruit or vegetables, the PEELINGS are a big pile, and they are plural, but when you take them and maybe chop them, or soak them, or whatever, so they can be used in a recipe, they become PEEL, which is an uncountable noun, like SAND. For example a recipe might say "add two tablespoons of grated lemon peel" (or lemon RIND). Somewhere, it has changed from PEELINGS to PEEL or RIND.
Yayya Lautner If you do not want it to be so sweet then just add less sugar. It is up to you.
From a purely practical perspective, those two sentences seem redundant to me.
Yayya LautnerAfter that, place the mixture into a pot and cook it under a slow heat.
OVER a slow heat. If you're grilling something, then it's UNDER heat, but a pot sits OVER the heat.
Yayya LautnerAfter a few minutes, add a spoon of pectin to thicken the mixture and leave it cool.
"leave it TO cool"

"a spoon" is not specific enough for a recipe

Should you stir it before you let it cool? That seems obvious, but it's often stated explicitly in recipes.
Yayya LautnerThen pour the jam into pre-strelised container
into A pre-sterilised container (or just sterilised without the "pre-")
Yayya Lautnerand seal the mouth and
now we are one step left to make a marmalade.
This sentence has at least two errors and could be reworded in various ways. It's hard to reword that sentence correctly if you want to mention making marmalade, but I don't think you need to use those words in this sentence. This is the end of a recipe for marmalade, so that should be pretty obvious.

That will get us to "now we HAVE one step left." (No mention of MAKE or MARMALADE). You could also say "now there's JUST one step left" or "now you're on the last step" or "now you're nearly finished" (or nearly DONE, in America).
Yayya Lautner Refrigerate it for one night and it will last for several months.
Sounds yummy.

KrisBlueNZ

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