Make vs makes

Hi,

For example, if you eat certain sweets,it makes thick smoke, perfume, makes one sings well and make fire...etc. It is so fantastic!!! I want to buy those fancy things

I'll correct the grammar. But your meaning just seems like nonsense.

For example, if you eat certain

Actually, this is the original text, but thanks for editing what i thought was correct. you see, i am editing a child's essay and that's why it seems so irrevelant to the both of us. but the guideline must be that i will not change the order of the sentence, though i edited it and you as well the meaning is still nonsense,, i hope you could edit this original sentence below,..

Actually, this is the original text, but thanks for editing what i thought was correct. you see, i am editing a child's essay and that's why it seems so irrevelant to the both of us. but the guideline must be that i will not change the order of the sentence, though i edited it and you as well the meaning is still nonsense,, i hope you could edit this original sentence below,..

nope. the sentence was based on that story of roald dahl. the essay was written because the topic was the story. i hope you could give me the correct version of this sentence please.

For example, making thick smoke, perfume sweet(Globgobbler), make one sings well, make fire...etc. It was so fantastic!!!
I want to buy the

That was a wrong sentence that I posted. I hope to get your opinion about it. as you can see, this is the original taken from the essay, the previous one i posted before was my own construction that you edited... i need your help coz i am really confused..


For example, making thick smoke, perfume sweet(Globgobbler), make one sings well, make fire...etc. I

Not sure if this is what you're after, but here you go:

For example, if you eat a certain sweet it will make (you breathe) thick smoke, some sweets make (you smell like) pe

gretchenplay...etc.

gretchenplay!!!

Thanks for the suggestion it will help me rearrange the sentence. but do you think that putting 3 periods and ETC is appropriate to put in an essay? and 3 exclamation points? it based on the sentence you edited, i need your suggestion.

If i cannot use ETC in an essay, what words will substitute in this sentence?

For example, if you eat a certain sweet, it will make thick smoke and perfume, makes one sing well and another makes fire, etc. It is so fantastic! I want to buy those fancy sweets!

Instead of ellipses(...), what will i substitute?