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Kamlesh12 Posted 15 years ago
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Mail Suggestion
Hello All,
Below is the mail which i would like to send to my prpspect. kindly correct me if there is any mistake?
Please suggest me the good effective mail with more professional words.
I hope you are doing well. We know that your payroll is outsourced to the third party. In your company the payroll is handled by the Team. We have clients where we have replaced the outsourcing model by our payroll software.We would like to discuss about the cost benefits with you and your team. We would be glad to share our existing client list where we have helped them to reduce their cost for your reference check.We have bulk full and final feature in our software which you have mentioned me over the phone. Its our dream to work with you on our 100% customer satisfaction product evaluation program.Kindly provide us an opportunity where we could present our complete demo to your entire team. I personally involve my Our Head Marketing for the Demo.
Kamlesh
Below is the mail which i would like to send to my prpspect. kindly correct me if there is any mistake?
Please suggest me the good effective mail with more professional words.
I hope you are doing well. We know that your payroll is outsourced to the third party. In your company the payroll is handled by the Team. We have clients where we have replaced the outsourcing model by our payroll software.We would like to discuss about the cost benefits with you and your team. We would be glad to share our existing client list where we have helped them to reduce their cost for your reference check.We have bulk full and final feature in our software which you have mentioned me over the phone. Its our dream to work with you on our 100% customer satisfaction product evaluation program.Kindly provide us an opportunity where we could present our complete demo to your entire team. I personally involve my Our Head Marketing for the Demo.
Kamlesh
Top answer
I hope you are doing well. We know that your payroll is outsourced to a third party. We think in your company the payroll is handled by a team of people ( Please use a word which can best replace people ).
- I hope you are doing well.
- We know that your payroll is outsourced to a third party.
- We think in your company the payroll is handled by a team of people ( Please use a word which can best replace people ).
- We have clients who have replaced their outsourcing model with our payroll software.
- We would like to discuss the cost benefits with you and your team.
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I hope you are doing well.
We know that your payroll is outsourced to a third party. We think in your company the payroll is handled by a team of people (Please use a word which can best replace people). We have clients who have replaced their outsourcing model with our payroll software.
We would like
We know that your payroll is outsourced to a third party. We think in your company the payroll is handled by a team of people (Please use a word which can best replace people). We have clients who have replaced their outsourcing model with our payroll software.
We would like
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How's this? (I'm not sure what "bulk full and final features" are so I left those words as-is.
I hope you are doing well. We know that your payroll is outsourced to the third party. In your company the payroll is handled by the Team. We have clients with whom we have replaced the outsourcing model with our payroll software. We would like to discuss with you and your team the cost benefi
I hope you are doing well. We know that your payroll is outsourced to the third party. In your company the payroll is handled by the Team. We have clients with whom we have replaced the outsourcing model with our payroll software. We would like to discuss with you and your team the cost benefi
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Hi,
Thanks for your suggestion. It helps me to improve my e-mail communication.
Kamlesh
Thanks for your suggestion. It helps me to improve my e-mail communication.
Kamlesh
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Can you please suggest me the improvement areas and some exercise on that which we will help help me to understand the scenario?
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Hi,
Thanks for your reply. i thought the most of the mistakes are related to tense and preposition. can you please suggest me how can i come over this thing?
Kamlesh
Thanks for your reply. i thought the most of the mistakes are related to tense and preposition. can you please suggest me how can i come over this thing?
Kamlesh
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