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PreciousJones Posted 14 years ago
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Luis

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I’d like to tell you about a recent fellow I met in class a couple days ago. His name is Luis Mijangos. His parents are from Guatemala, but he’s from Los Angeles. He went to University High School and UC Santa Barbara. A 20 year old young man working at Trader Joe’s and majoring in Criminal Justice. His dream is to become an LAPD police man and ultimately a private detective. Don’t mess with the South Central LA boys, because a lot of them could kick your asses, especially when it comes to football AKA soccer. He’s single and loves it when it’s Thursday, because that’s his day off, so he’s got plenty of time to hang out with the ladies. A vacay to Las Vegas is probably his most desired activity, but he’d settle with just watching training day with his buddies. Hip hop created by Tupac and Eminem is definitely music to his ears and when it comes down to it, nobody would ever wanna miss a beat of what he is about.
  

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I've underlined some problem areas for you: I’d like to tell you about a recent fellow I met in class a couple days ago. His name is Luis Mijangos. His parents are from Guatemala, but he’s from Los Angeles.

— Mister Micawber

  • I've underlined some problem areas for you: I’d like to tell you about a recent fellow I met in class a couple days ago.
  • His name is Luis Mijangos.
  • His parents are from Guatemala, but he’s from Los Angeles.
  • He went to University High School and UC Santa Barbara.
  • A 20 year old young man working at Trader Joe’s and majoring in Criminal Justice.
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I've underlined some problem areas for you:

I’d like to tell you about a recent fellow I met in class a couple days ago. His name is Luis Mijangos. His parents are from Guatemala, but he’s from Los Angeles. He went to University High School and UC Santa Barbara. A 20 year old young man working at Trader Joe’s and majoring in Criminal Justice. (no verb) H
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I'd like to tell you about a recent fellow I met in class a couple days ago. His name is Luis Mijangos. His parents are from Guatemala, but he’s from Los Angeles. He went to University high school and UC Santa Barbara. He's a 20 year old young man working at Trader Joe’s and majoring in Criminal Justice. It's his dream to become an LAPD policeman and ultimately a private det
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PreciousJonesa couple days ago.
Hi,
I guess this one should be, '... a couple of days ago.'

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I'd like to tell you about a fellow I recently met in class a couple of days ago. His name is Luis Mijangos. His parents are from Guatemala, but he’s from Los Angeles. He went to university high school and UC Santa Barbara. He's a 20-year-old young man working at Trader Joe’s and majoring in criminal justice. It's his dream to become an LAPD policeman and ult
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Mister MicawberI'd like to tell you about a fellow I recently met in class a couple of days ago. His name is Luis Mijangos. His parents are from Guatemala, but he’s from Los Angeles. He went to university high school and UC Santa Barbara. He's a 20-year-old young man working at Trader Joe’s and majoring in criminal justice. It's his dream to become an LAPD policeman and u
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