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Trystwithmyheart Posted 21 years ago

Lost Dream

0Was I suppose to 02br
00Forget who I was 02br
00To satisfy who you are. 02br
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00Was I suppose to 02br
00Change my soul 02br
00So that you could stay the same. 02br
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00When was I going to 02br
00Come first 02br
00While you stood in the shadows. 02br
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00When was I going to 02br
00Receive love 02br
00While you, for once gave. 02br
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00How long must I 02br
00Wait for you to see me 02br
00Instead of me trying to get your attention. 02br
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00How long must I 02br
00Dream a lost dream 02br
00Before I realize it is lost. 0-
  

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0 I think you have summed up a lot of relationships there. Nicely done. 0-

— Nona the brit

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0 I think you have summed up a lot of relationships there. Nicely done. 0-
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0'Suppose01b00d02b00 to'. 02br
00'Me' should be 'my' in the last line of the 6th stanza. 02br
00Thre should be a comma after 'once'. 02br
00Each stanza is a question, and should end in a question mark. 02br
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00Otherwise, an interesting menu of food for thought. 0-
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0 Thank you Mister Micawber. You are correct. I would have never of noticed the "me" and the "my". Enjoy a beautiful day! 0-
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ur poem reflects the depth of pain which either u felt urself or saw someone undergoing through it. ur poem touches heart.
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Mister Micawber'Supposed to'.
'Me' should be 'my' in the last line of the 6th stanza.
Thre should be a comma after 'once'.
Each stanza is a question, and should end in a question mark.

Otherwise, an interesting menu of food for thought.
I'd also add were instead of was, 'cause it was widely used in poetry... [Note:
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Trystwithmyheart

This poem really touched me. I grew up an only child, raised by a single mother. I love my mother but she was(still is) a bit controlling. As a result, I got myself in to a career that I don't much enjoy and a life that doesn't really fit me. I'm almost thirty and I'm realizing that the life that would fit me might be out of reach. This poem seems written for me.
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TrystwithmyheartWas I suppose to Forget who I was To satisfy who you are.

That's why I never give up on girls by changing my self. I want someone who can accept the real me, not superficial of their ideal.

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