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Anonymous Posted 12 years ago
Grammar

Looks okay?

PLACE WHERE THE CHILDREN, PRESUMABLY, ARE

That is a title for a subsection in a form that deals with abducted children (for my bachelor's thesis). Looks okay?

Thanks!
  

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Anonymous : Looks okay? No. It rambles.

— Mister Micawber

  • Anonymous : Looks okay?
  • No.
  • It rambles.
  • I cannot judge the topic of your subsection from that title, and that is a failing.
  • — WHERE ARE THE CHILDREN?
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Anonymous: Looks okay?
No. It rambles. I cannot judge the topic of your subsection from that title, and that is a failing. Is it this, perhaps?—

WHERE ARE THE CHILDREN?
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In this section I will analyze possible location of abducted children. Maybe this option for a title is better:

POSSIBLE LOCATION OF THE CHILDREN

(in this case I am speaking about specific children thus I am using "The")

is this better?
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AnonymousPOSSIBLE LOCATION OF THE CHILDREN
That is OK, but I like mine better.
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Thank you! You helped a lot!
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