Look at my lyrics, please

Hello, our band is going to record a song, but before doing it, I would like it to be cheked by a native-speaker. I will provide you with the whole text and highlight the parts I'm not sure about. Thanks in advance!

VERSE 1:

are you astir my foxy woman
I think I am
and I conclude (or is it better to use "infer" or anything else?) you can be cruel
that’s all you can

but question is will you refrain
oh begging you make an effort
now will you sit now will you stay
and watch me living on the spot (= right now?)

VERSE 2:

are you excessive in (not sure) desires
I feel this way
In spite of you being a liar
I’m still the same

I take the shame
but there’s no water in my eyes
there is no blues
you are inside me that’s a slaughter

I think I love I hope you...

PRE-CHORUS:

pay me
all at once
there's no need
to resist/retreat/recede (wich fits better?)
the sun’s (I would like to use "sol’s" instead of "sun's" though) up for you

CHORUS:

wake up
in the morning
I see the heaven’s burning
you kip down (the internet says it's ok, but a native-speaker from England told me it's wrong)
in the evening
I see the hell is freezing

VERSE 3:

are you astir my pretty woman
'coz I’m not far
you are so rude you are so cruel
that’s all you are

the day is turning in the night
when I can’t find here any clue
oh don’t remain me just aside
I think I love I hope you...

...

VERSE 4:

this hot and stormy summer night
leads us along
the road of sour and heady/reckless wine
so I’m not assured

are you astir or just asleep
oh that’s a pity I look through
the frame of a complicated lie
I think I love I hope you...