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Anonymous Posted 11 years ago
Grammar
Long sentence with long informative clause.
Greetings
I'm currently translating some corporate material from Turkish but Turkish and English has one main difference. Turkish is extremely prone to long sentences while English suffers when you try to keep up in that regard. There's a sentence that I suppose would go like:
"In their joint efforts, Our television and media production companies continue to carry XYZ TV, Turkey’s first TV channel with HD infrastructure, to greater heights, which started broadcasting in 2010."
Is this sentence grammatically correct? Can I separate the expression "carry to greater heights" like this?
The Turkish sentence makes perfect sense but the English translation, when left in a single, cluttered block like that, feels stifling.
P.S: XYZ TV is a made-up name. There's no such Turkish tv channel.
I'm currently translating some corporate material from Turkish but Turkish and English has one main difference. Turkish is extremely prone to long sentences while English suffers when you try to keep up in that regard. There's a sentence that I suppose would go like:
"In their joint efforts, Our television and media production companies continue to carry XYZ TV, Turkey’s first TV channel with HD infrastructure, to greater heights, which started broadcasting in 2010."
Is this sentence grammatically correct? Can I separate the expression "carry to greater heights" like this?
The Turkish sentence makes perfect sense but the English translation, when left in a single, cluttered block like that, feels stifling.
P.S: XYZ TV is a made-up name. There's no such Turkish tv channel.
Top answer
Anonymous Is this sentence grammatically correct? No. As you surmised, you are doing what most translators do: you are adding words that just clutter; they are unnecessary for understanding by a native speaker.
- Anonymous Is this sentence grammatically correct?
- No.
- As you surmised, you are doing what most translators do: you are adding words that just clutter; they are unnecessary for understanding by a native speaker.
- This is quite sufficient: Since XYZ TV started broadcasting in 2010, our television and media production companies continue to carry Turkey’s first HD TV channel to greater heights.
- Anonymous Can I separate the expression "carry to greater heights" like this?
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AnonymousIs this sentence grammatically correct?No. As you surmised, you are doing what most translators do: you are adding words that just clutter; they are unnecessary for understanding by a native speaker. This is quite sufficient:
Since XYZ TV started broadcasting in 2010, our television and media production companies continue to carry Turkey
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