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MidnightSpark Posted 12 years ago
Grammar

Little help, please?

I'm going over a story for someone, and came across this line;
The early winter morning moonlight reflected off the blanket of snow outside.

Something feels wrong with it, but for the life of me, I can't figure out what. It may just be the way I am reading it in my head. Thanks in advance for any help!
  

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MidnightSpark The early winter morning moonlight This does seem a little dense. But it's technically okay. I think the idea of moonlight in the morning takes a little time to digest.

  • MidnightSpark The early winter morning moonlight This does seem a little dense.
  • But it's technically okay.
  • I think the idea of moonlight in the morning takes a little time to digest.
  • Perhaps smaller bites.
  • The moonlight, still lingering in the early winter morning, reflected etc.
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MidnightSparkThe early winter morning moonlight
This does seem a little dense. But it's technically okay.

I think the idea of moonlight in the morning takes a little time to digest. Perhaps smaller bites.

The moonlight, still lingering in the early winter morning, reflected etc.

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