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Mthomas Posted 22 years ago
Grammar
Listing within a list?
Here is what I mean. In the following example, there are two categories: 1) maintenance of school grounds, equipment, buses, and athlectic facilities; and 2) police officers. Obviously, the first category has sub categories. So, what is the best way to link the two without making the sentence confusing?
Here is the sentence I need to edit:
The City of Stafford is not only involved in the governance of SMSD but also provides services to the district: maintenance of school grounds, equipment, buses, and athletic facilities and police officers who provide security during school hours and extracurricular activities.
Hope this makes sense. Any help/recommendations would be appreciated. Thanks.
Here is the sentence I need to edit:
The City of Stafford is not only involved in the governance of SMSD but also provides services to the district: maintenance of school grounds, equipment, buses, and athletic facilities and police officers who provide security during school hours and extracurricular activities.
Hope this makes sense. Any help/recommendations would be appreciated. Thanks.
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The City of Stafford is not only involved in the governance of SMSD but also provides services to the district; maintenance of school grounds, equipment, buses, athletic facilities and police officers who provide security during school hours and extracurricular activities. I have changed your colon to a semicolon and removed a comma too.
- The City of Stafford is not only involved in the governance of SMSD but also provides services to the district; maintenance of school grounds, equipment, buses, athletic facilities and police officers who provide security during school hours and extracurricular activities.
- I have changed your colon to a semicolon and removed a comma too.
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The City of Stafford is not only involved in the governance of SMSD but also provides services to the district; maintenance of school grounds, equipment, buses, athletic facilities and police officers who provide security during school hours and extracurricular activities.
I have changed your colon to a semicolon and removed a comma too.
I have changed your colon to a semicolon and removed a comma too.
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What about
"The City of Stafford is not only involved in the governance of SMSD but also provides services to the district: maintenance of school grounds, equipment, buses and athletic facilities as well as police officers who provide security during school hours and extracurricular activities."
"The City of Stafford is not only involved in the governance of SMSD but also provides services to the district: maintenance of school grounds, equipment, buses and athletic facilities as well as police officers who provide security during school hours and extracurricular activities."
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