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Mthomas Posted 22 years ago
Grammar

Listing within a list?

Here is what I mean. In the following example, there are two categories: 1) maintenance of school grounds, equipment, buses, and athlectic facilities; and 2) police officers. Obviously, the first category has sub categories. So, what is the best way to link the two without making the sentence confusing?

Here is the sentence I need to edit:

The City of Stafford is not only involved in the governance of SMSD but also provides services to the district: maintenance of school grounds, equipment, buses, and athletic facilities and police officers who provide security during school hours and extracurricular activities.

Hope this makes sense. Any help/recommendations would be appreciated. Thanks.
  

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The City of Stafford is not only involved in the governance of SMSD but also provides services to the district; maintenance of school grounds, equipment, buses, athletic facilities and police officers who provide security during school hours and extracurricular activities. I have changed your colon to a semicolon and removed a comma too.

  • The City of Stafford is not only involved in the governance of SMSD but also provides services to the district; maintenance of school grounds, equipment, buses, athletic facilities and police officers who provide security during school hours and extracurricular activities.
  • I have changed your colon to a semicolon and removed a comma too.
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The City of Stafford is not only involved in the governance of SMSD but also provides services to the district; maintenance of school grounds, equipment, buses, athletic facilities and police officers who provide security during school hours and extracurricular activities.


I have changed your colon to a semicolon and removed a comma too.
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What about
"The City of Stafford is not only involved in the governance of SMSD but also provides services to the district: maintenance of school grounds, equipment, buses and athletic facilities as well as police officers who provide security during school hours and extracurricular activities."
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thanks for the help.

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