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Shangrilaottawa Posted 15 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Listing attributes in a paragraph, with ephasis: dashes? commas?

I was writing a cover letter and realized that I had no idea how to properly construct the kind of emphatic list of attributes that I wanted to convey.

Here is the basic outline of the letter. I've removed the meat of it with periods.

I've highlighted the area I'm asking about. I have tried to rephrase the paragraph by breaking it up into sentences because it is a very very long one. It didn't have as much punch.

Does any one have any recommendations?

Are you looking for an enthusiastic, open-minded and.... ? Look no further!

I am a professional.... I am eager to put my passion for.... to work as....

In me, you would gain a productive professional who....--an influential communicator committed to .... --an intelligent, highly capable and.....
  

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Hi, Generally speaking, say . . who is an A, a B and a C.

— Clive

  • Hi, Generally speaking, say .
  • .
  • who is an A, a B and a C.
  • But it's better if we can see your complete sentence.
  • Clive
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Hi,

Generally speaking, say . . . who is an A, a B and a C.

But it's better if we can see your complete sentence.

Clive
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In me, you would gain a productive professional who connects easily with students, coworkers and external stakeholders -- an influential communicator committed to sharing __’s message at home and overseas -- an intelligent, highly capable and independent learner who is able to implement administrative tasks and manage complex critical paths, while working very effectively with colleagues to furthe
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Hi,

In me, you would gain a productive professional who connects easily with students, coworkers and external stakeholders an influential communicator committed to sharing __’s message at home and overseas an intelligent, highly capable and independent learner who is able to implement administrative tasks and manage complex critical paths, w
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