Line Graph - Task 1 IETLS

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The line graph illustrates the birth rate and death rate of a country, namely New Zealand from 1901 to 2101.

Overall, the birth rate of New Zealand had been higher than the death rate over the period shown. In the future, however, there is expected to be an opposing trend that deaths are going to be larger than births.

In 1901, New Zealand had about 20,000 births. This figure considerably increased to 40,000s after 40 years and reached its peak of roughly 65,000s in 1961. Concurrently, the death rate of New Zealand also rose gradually and continued to rise to about 35,000 deaths in this year, 2021. Whereas, there has been a slight decrease to 50,000 births in New Zealand at the same time.

By 2061, the death rate is anticipated to constantly increase and reach its high of roughly 58,000s this figure is going to stabilize at about 57,000s until 2101. In contrast, from 2021 to 2191, the birth rate is expected to see a steady decrease to 42,000s births.

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The line graph ~~illustrate~~s (not a good word choice. There are many better ones. ) plots / shows / gives / compares the birth rate and death rate of ~~a country, namely~~ New Zealand from 1901 to 2101. (This date range includes past, present and future, so you have to describe them differently.)

Overall, the birth rate of New Zealand had been higher than the death rate over the period shown. (That is not a good expression. It does not accurately describe this information.) In the future, however, there is expected to be an opposing trend (unnatural phrase) that the number of deaths is ~~are~~ going to be larger than births.

In 1901, New Zealand had about 20,000 births. This ~~figure~~ (wrong word) ~~considerably~~ number increased considerably to 40,000s (That is not a valid number) after 40 years and reached its peak of roughly 65,000s in 1961. Concurrently, the death rate of in New Zealand also rose gradually and continued to rise to about 35,000 deaths in ~~this year,~~ 2021. Whereas, there has been a slight decrease to 50,000 births in New Zealand at the same time. (That is not a sentence. It is a dependent clause.)

~~By 2061~~, After 2021, the death rate is anticipated to constantly increase and reach its high of roughly 58,000s ~~this figure is going to~~ stabilizing at about 57,000s until 2101. In contrast, from 2021 to 2191, the birth rate is expected to ~~see a steady~~ (Numbers cannot see. Only animals or machines with eyes can see.) decrease steadily to 42,000s births.

Example essay

The line graph plots the birth and death rates of New Zealand from 1901 to the present date, with a forecast to 2101.

Overall, the birth rate was higher than the death rate from 1901 to the present. Over the next forty years, however, the birth rate is predicted to drop and the death rate will rise, reaching the same level around 2041.

In detail, in 1901, New Zealand had about 20 thousand births and half that number of deaths. The birth rate had a major change around 1935; the numbers went up by a factor of two and a half from about 26 to 66 thousand in 1961 (the peak year). In contrast, the death rate had a very gradual increase of about 5 thousand from 15 to 20 thousand. Since then the birth rate has declined as the death rate continued to rise, the current values being 51 thousand births and 33 thousand deaths. The next major point will come in 2041, when the two will equalize at about 48 thousand. Thereafter, the birth rate will continue to slowly decline as the death rate surpasses it and then levels off at about 68 thousand in 2060. At the end of the century, there are forecast to be 42 thousand births compared to 56 thousand deaths.

Line Graph - Task 1 IETLS

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