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The provided diagram compares the number of sightseers to England who paid a visit four different places in Brighton over a period of 30 years starting from 1980.

Overall, while the country saw a significant growth in the number of tourists went to pavilion and pier, the opposite was true for art gallery and festival visitors.

It can be seen clearly from the graph that in 1980, festival travellers were accounted for the highest number in all four places surveyed, at 30%, in comparison with only 10% for the people attracted by pier. In addition, the percentage of those to art gallery and pavilion stood at about 21% and 23% respectively.

Looking at the given chart in more details, between 1980 and 2010, the rate of pavilion visitors reached a peak of nearly 50% in 1995 before decreasing substantially to just 30% in 2010. The year 2010 witnessed an upward trend to 21% in the figure for sightseers enjoy going to pier. By contrast, festival and art gallery became less popular than previous 30 years, the figure dropped to 27% and 8% in turn.