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Anonymous Posted 15 years ago
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Letter requesting sponsors for a non-profit event
I work for a non-profit that is approaching our 3rd annual charity motocross event to benefit mitochondrial disease research and raise awareness. Below is our current letter requesting sponsors for raffle items (our main source of fundraising). I was hoping to receive some feedback.
Thank you in advance!
Our letter:
It has been stated that 1 in 4,000 children will develop a Mitochondrial Disease by the age of 10 years old (mitoaction.org.) My child is the 1 in 4000. There is no cure for this disease and most who hear of it have the same response, “What’s Mitochondrial Disease??”
My name is xxxx xxxxx. I’m the mother of two kids. My oldest, xxxx, is a 10 year old boy who has considered all dirt bike riders his role model, next to his Dad, since he was 2 years old. He has developed a love for racing and hopes one day to compete in freestyle events. Easton has only one other passion that comes close to his love for dirt bikes, the battle against Mitochondrial Disease. His baby sister, xxxx, who is now 6 years old, was diagnosed at 18 months with this horrendous disease. I will not overwhelm you with the details, but will invite you to visit our website for further information. However, I will say that Mitochondrial Disease affects people from head to toe. Essentially Mitochondrial Disease is a deficiency in the body’s ability to form energy leaving all other organs and life supporting functions to suffer. It preys on adults with later onset, but it also preys on innocent children forcing their lives to be hindered by this monster. Symptoms range in severity from mild to fatal. There is no treatment, no cure and minimal research is being completed due to lack of funding. There is only care, comfort and maintenance for the patient.
xxxxxx is a non-profit organization that’s mission is to support advocacy, awareness and ultimately a cure for Mitochondrial Disease. On October 1, 2011, the third annual xxxxxx will take place. We are very pleased to announce that we were able to raise a combined $20,000.00 in years previous, donating all proceeds to the Mitochondrial Community! This year we expect to greatly exceed this amount, with helpful sponsors such as you. xxxxxx's Board has made the decision to devote their time and dedication to fundraising for two non-profit organizations, MitoAction and UMDF. Both organizations are extremely committed to the Mitochondrial Disease community focusing on support for the individuals, the families, awareness and a cure.
At this time, I would like to ask for your generosity in helping to support our mission. Since this year’s event is very similar to the previous year we will again offer the raffle tent. In the past this area was filled with items such as gift baskets, gift certificates, tools, personal apparel, jewelry and much more. We are looking for similar donations again this year, but are always open to new ideas, too.
We look forward to speaking with you in the near future and are available at any time for questions. Once again, please visit our website for additional information regarding the devastating effects of Mitochondrial Disease and our goal to leaving Mitochondrial Disease in the dust.
Thank you in advance!
Our letter:
It has been stated that 1 in 4,000 children will develop a Mitochondrial Disease by the age of 10 years old (mitoaction.org.) My child is the 1 in 4000. There is no cure for this disease and most who hear of it have the same response, “What’s Mitochondrial Disease??”
My name is xxxx xxxxx. I’m the mother of two kids. My oldest, xxxx, is a 10 year old boy who has considered all dirt bike riders his role model, next to his Dad, since he was 2 years old. He has developed a love for racing and hopes one day to compete in freestyle events. Easton has only one other passion that comes close to his love for dirt bikes, the battle against Mitochondrial Disease. His baby sister, xxxx, who is now 6 years old, was diagnosed at 18 months with this horrendous disease. I will not overwhelm you with the details, but will invite you to visit our website for further information. However, I will say that Mitochondrial Disease affects people from head to toe. Essentially Mitochondrial Disease is a deficiency in the body’s ability to form energy leaving all other organs and life supporting functions to suffer. It preys on adults with later onset, but it also preys on innocent children forcing their lives to be hindered by this monster. Symptoms range in severity from mild to fatal. There is no treatment, no cure and minimal research is being completed due to lack of funding. There is only care, comfort and maintenance for the patient.
xxxxxx is a non-profit organization that’s mission is to support advocacy, awareness and ultimately a cure for Mitochondrial Disease. On October 1, 2011, the third annual xxxxxx will take place. We are very pleased to announce that we were able to raise a combined $20,000.00 in years previous, donating all proceeds to the Mitochondrial Community! This year we expect to greatly exceed this amount, with helpful sponsors such as you. xxxxxx's Board has made the decision to devote their time and dedication to fundraising for two non-profit organizations, MitoAction and UMDF. Both organizations are extremely committed to the Mitochondrial Disease community focusing on support for the individuals, the families, awareness and a cure.
At this time, I would like to ask for your generosity in helping to support our mission. Since this year’s event is very similar to the previous year we will again offer the raffle tent. In the past this area was filled with items such as gift baskets, gift certificates, tools, personal apparel, jewelry and much more. We are looking for similar donations again this year, but are always open to new ideas, too.
We look forward to speaking with you in the near future and are available at any time for questions. Once again, please visit our website for additional information regarding the devastating effects of Mitochondrial Disease and our goal to leaving Mitochondrial Disease in the dust.
Top answer
Here is another version of your letter. I took the opportunity to using my medical training to try and improve the section describing the disease - but you may or may not like it. Dear XX, It has been stated that 1 in 4,000 children will develop a Mitochondrial Disease by the age of 10.
- Here is another version of your letter.
- I took the opportunity to using my medical training to try and improve the section describing the disease - but you may or may not like it.
- Dear XX, It has been stated that 1 in 4,000 children will develop a Mitochondrial Disease by the age of 10.
- ).
- My child is that 1.
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Here is another version of your letter.
I took the opportunity to using my medical training to try and improve the section describing the disease - but you may or may not like it.
Dear XX,
It has been stated that 1 in 4,000 children will develop a Mitochondrial Disease by the age of 10. (www.mitoaction.or
I took the opportunity to using my medical training to try and improve the section describing the disease - but you may or may not like it.
Dear XX,
It has been stated that 1 in 4,000 children will develop a Mitochondrial Disease by the age of 10. (www.mitoaction.or
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