Letter Of Purpose - please help me to correct it

Hey,

I want to apply for a university in the USA and I need to write a letter of purpose. So i did but I am not sure if this is ok because i never wrote one of this kind before. It would be really great if someone would help me. Thanks for your efforts.

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Dear Sir or Madam,

In this letter I want to explain my motivation to spend one semester at the .... . Particularly I am interested in gaining new experiences from a new culture and to deepening my knowledge in business studies. At that point in time I am in the third semester in my studies of International Management at the University of Applied Sciences ... and I am planning to spend my fourth semester at ... .

From one semester at your university I expect at first to broaden my knowledge with a professional and international perspective of business issues. Furthermore I am intrigued in improving my English skills and I want to learn a lot about the people, history and culture of the USA, especially of .... Therefore I choose the... .

I finished my basic studies of International Management in the last winter term successfully. This basic studies contained a broad variety in different subjects even technical ones. The strong focus was constantly on topics belonging concerning economics and business administration, whereupon my performance always was above average. Due to a lot of basic courses I attended at my university I am endowed with very important basic knowledge what makes me capable of joining advanced lectures in business administration, marketing and economics.

Among my studies I am a member of the student’s council of our faculty where we organize several events for freshmen and carrying out specific administrative tasks. Within a project, together with a Professor of our university, we are organizing a congress for the .... in September.

I chose ... as my desired destination abroad, because this country has fascinated me for a long time. I have never been to the USA before but I read a lot about ... and I saw a lot of movies about it, too. I am astonished by this great cultural variety and by the great cities like Los Angeles or San Francisco. I am also really attracted by the famous Silicon Valley from which I heard a lot in my former lectures in relation to the New Economy. Therefore I am really excited to settle down for half a year in ... to see that country and the people through another perspective instead of just being a tourist.

The .... provides an opportunity for me, to deepen my knowledge, to improve my English skills and to widen my horizon. This University is offering particularly good matching courses to my interests and my course of studies so that they will be acknowledged at the University of Applied Sciences in ..., too.

I hope with this letter I revealed my purpose and my desire to spend one semester in an amazing country and at an unique university. I feel confident that my qualifications are complete sufficient and that I am able to meet the demands and requirements for this challenge at the... .

I am looking forward to a potential semester in ... and I hope I managed to convince you of my personage. Hopefully you get down to a positive appraisal of my application.

Thank you very much for your efforts.

Yours faithfully,
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