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IMTB Posted 19 years ago
Letter Writing

Letter of Motivation/Cover Letter

0 hey guys im applying for an international study program. my letter is not finished yet. but i would like to hear any comments about what i've done so far...02br
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00I'm working with this particular layout:02br
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01font01font00First Paragraph: 02font02font01font01font00"Why I'm Writing" -- Introduction of self and statement of interest.02br
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01font01font00Second Paragraph:02font02font01font01font00"How I'm Qualified."02font02font01font01font00Briefly describe your academic and professional qualifications.02br
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01font01font00Third Paragraph:02font02font01font01font00"Why I'm Right for this Job."02br
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01font01font00Fourth (or last) Paragraph:02font02font01font01font00"What Steps I'll Take to Make Sure We Talk Further about My Qualifications."02br
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00I wrote paragraph 1 and 2, which are still not sufficient...in my mind. Some phrases are pretty standart, gonna replace them. just wanted to finish the pragraph for an overview. hope you can contributeto a great result at the end of the process. by time im gonna add the other paragraps and hopefully improved paragraphs02br
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00With my birth in Russia my internationally career was introduced. 00 00It conducted me to Germany and from there in various countries of Europe. Now it’s time to boost my internationally career up to a new level. And the Netherlands are predestined for this matter with their unique distinguished education system. And at the peak of it appears your Institute. I’m truly convinced that the “xxx program” will redefine my international career. Therefore I want to apply for a place in our “xxx program”.02br
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00After my regular 00graduation I decided to specialize with economic and languages. Thus, I participated to a special program of a 00Commercial College at the Berufskolleg Neuss. The name of the program is European Business Class and the emphases are commercial, languages and informatics. The most classes took place with the emphasis commercial and also in English. Additionally, I learned an extra language with Spanish. Projects which took place by every class in regularity are a feature of this program too. After the first year of the commercial college I’ve accomplished a work placement by the finance company LBS. Over 3 weeks competent knowledge in finance, responsibly working and dealing with customers was added to my universe.02br
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00In order of the focus languages I performed a work placement in Eastbourne, England for two weeks. There, I attended to a work placement by the company Association of Charity Shops. In order of the placement I gained experience from all aspects of this company and interacting with English speaking people. Thus, I experienced the satisfaction of working with the English language.02br
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00To enhance my higher education I decided to run a work placement by the renowned advertising agency BBDO. Thereby, I dealt with many customers and also English speaking customers. This work placement taught me to performing responsibly affairs by my own and under pressure. Furthermore, many huge in-house projects took place with my attendance.0-
  

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2br 00 Hi,02br 02br 00with regard to paragraph 1: you are writing to them because there is an opportunity not because you were everywhere. Millions of people are born in Russia but this is not a reason for an international career. If you want to, you can point of your international experience, but this is something different.

  • 2br 00 Hi,02br 02br 00with regard to paragraph 1: you are writing to them because there is an opportunity not because you were everywhere.
  • Millions of people are born in Russia but this is not a reason for an international career.
  • If you want to, you can point of your international experience, but this is something different.
  • 02br 02br 00Best wishes,02br 02br 00Kathrin02br 0-
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00with regard to paragraph 1: you are writing to them because there is an opportunity not because you were everywhere. Millions of people are born in Russia but this is not a reason for an international career. If you want to, you can point of your international experience, but this is something different. In my opinion the first paragragh is a de
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0 thanks for the advice...just wants to make something that attracts attention. Do you think i should phrase it more traditionally?02br
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00well here a different version of the second paragraph:02br
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00After my regular 00graduation I decided to specialize with co
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0Hi,02br
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00attracting attention is of course your main aim but you should do this without backfiring:-) There are many diverse ways how to attract attention. In my opinion, you had chosen not the best one but of course this is only my opinion.02br
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00They don't need the full description of your course. This should stay in the CV, not in the coveri
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0 no, no need to be sorry. u might be right...im stating to think i might have put to much information in the second paragraph0-
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0Hi,02br
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00according to NonatheBrit covering letters in the UK are very short and only sounds enthusiatic, that's all but this appies only to the UK. I have a post with regard to the subject. I tried to show you that you can shorten the second paragraph.02br
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00As for me, I had success with long and with short letters in both German and English so
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ok guys here we go....this is an idea of part 3....would appreciate any comments...

Part 3:

I am a very serious, goal-oriented individual motivated to evolve constantly and to equip myself with the knowledge and power to succeed in the future. One of my goals is to have the possibility to work in different d
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Hi,

I would like to see the ad for the position you are applying to, otherwise we would go on for donkey's years. The trick is somehow to write focusing on the items that they had made. I can somehow see that you may be an interesting person but if your letter fits, nobody really knows. Please make a copy of the ad or at least the key items
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here the rapidshare link for the brochure about the program: http://rapidshare.com/files/36953220/Brochures_5C27.04.pdf.html
and futhermore i would like to know whether nessecary to have my documents transla
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here the rapidshare link for the brochure about the program: http://rapidshare.com/files/36953220/Brochures_5C27.04.pdf.html
and futhermore i would like to know whether nessecary to have my documents transla
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Usually the institutions writes down in the ad whether they need the translation into English or not. Most of the empoyers don't need them in a earlier stage of the procedure. I would write an e-mail and aks them or just call them. As I was unsure about the call of the European Commission, I phoned them and the conversation was very pleasant. It turns out that my assumption was right but I was mu

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