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Starbucks Posted 19 years ago
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Letter of Motivation for Eventmanagement

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00I found a university that seems to be perfect for me, it its located in germany but the programme is 100% in english, they have a lot of partners such as Lufthansa Aida etc.02br
00It seems to be perfect for me because i always wanted to expand to another county such as america.I see my Future in America anyways.02br
00so right now i am preparing to apply for the university, they wanted to have an LoM, so i started to write one, to me quite a long time to find the right words to exppress my self and where i get my motivation for the bachelor programm in Eventmanagement.02br
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00So could you guys please read it and give me some feedback.if you ask me its not "complete" im missing something but i cant figure out what.02br
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00Dear Sirs,02br
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00I am writing to apply for the Bachelors programme in Eventmanagement at your university.I have set my goals for success and am determined to take the long path of hard and arduous work to achieve them.What Keeps me motivated to stick on my Goal is a quote from Frank Lloyd Wright:02br
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00“The price of success is dedication, hard work and an unremitting devotion to the things you want to see happen”02br
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00In recent years, I have been aware that I constantly enjoy and feel comfortable interacting and socializing with different types of individuals and situations. In turn, this is why I would choose a profession which allows me to utilize these social and organizational skills with others and also challenge my creative appetite. 02br
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00In 2005 I graduated with a degree in Computer Science from “*01b00Name of school*” located in ***city*, During this period I completed an Internship at “***companyname02b00**” GmbH, where I was able to experience the power of teamwork. I also experienced and built the necessary skills to cope with and handle the pressures and demands involved in a multi-functional job environment02br
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00I completed my alternative-service in the Dental Clinic of the Uni-klinikum *01b00location02b00***. At this job I gained more experience in Time Management skills as I was simultaneously working on many projects with extraneous applications.02br
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00I choose to attend the International University ****01b00name of uni02b00***** to further my education and would also hope that through my expericeses and insight I would positevly contribute to the school and its student body.02br
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00Regards02br
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00myname02br
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00Do you guys have any ideas what i could add or change?02br
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00I am thankful for everyhelp i get 0-
  

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0I think you should come up with a stronger reason for an interest in event management than enjoying interacting and socialising with people. That is a very tiny part of event management (if it happens at all). 0-

— Nona the brit

  • 0I think you should come up with a stronger reason for an interest in event management than enjoying interacting and socialising with people.
  • That is a very tiny part of event management (if it happens at all).
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0I think you should come up with a stronger reason for an interest in event management than enjoying interacting and socialising with people. That is a very tiny part of event management (if it happens at all). Why the career change from computer science?0-
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0 well why the change from computers is a good question.See i need alternation in my Job.and a job that challenges me.if the Job is monotone i get bored really quick.I read about Eventmanagement and it made click.i was convicted that this is exactly what i wanted.I talked to a friend who is organising events and he told me that it is not only funny and not only hanging around at the Event.He tol
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0Hi,02br
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00here are some generel remarks:02br
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001) Are you sure they are only men? Dear Sir is right, if there isn't a single woman, otherwise the woman wouldn't like it. If you are not sure Dear Sir or Madam is better. 02br
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002) In Germany, we are not used to find a quote in a cover letter and I have doubt it make a good
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0 Hello Kathrin,02br
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00All right i changed the sentence to "Dear Sir or Madam,"02br
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00Well i thought it was a good idea because that quote really keeps me going on.so is it wrong just because german profs.and teachers are not used to it?i can drop it, no big deal.02br
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00creative appetite yes i wrote that, because as i sai
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0Hi,02br
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00gosh, I have seen many samples of covering letter/cover letter/letter of motivation in German and English and not a single one included a quote, which means it is very risky to put something like that in a formal letter and a hard test for the HR department. In my opinion it is a too creative step but this is only my opinion. There are other ways to show who y
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0Hallo Kathrin02br
00ich hab noch mal weiter getippt.evtl kannst du noch mal hier drüber schauen //Hey Kathrin went on with the writing, perhaps you could read over it one more time and let me know what you think02br
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00Dear Sir or Madam,00 02br
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00My name is *********, I am twenty years old and live in **
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10ich hab noch mal weiter getippt.evtl kannst du noch mal hier drüber schauen //Hey Kathrin went on with the writing, perhaps you could read over it one more time and let me know what you think12br
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