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Anonymous Posted 10 years ago
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letter of motivation
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I am applying for a masters program in Germany. I would appreciate any feedback regarding the overall quality of my letter of motivation along with any grammar mistake.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this statement to express my interest in Computational Mechanics master course hoping that I will be given the opportunity to study at University of XXX as I believe my academic performance and bachelor of engineering from YYY University will be well suited for this program.
I had the biggest challenge in my academic life when I was 14. I had moved to a new school that taught in English and had a different curriculum than my previous school. The four years of studying there, from 9th to 12th grade, has taught me a lot. I had to cope with the new language and work hard to keep my grades high. The first semester of the new school I was ranked 13th in a class of 28 students with a reasonable total average. But there is always room for improvement so I tried my best, worked hard and graduated among the outstanding students. This phase of my academic journey had a significant effect on me as it taught me not to underestimate myself and work hard for my goals as well as time management since the non-scientific subjects consisted of various new vocabularies.
Nevertheless, high school introduced HTML and Visual Basic programming languages to me and I was absolutely fascinated by the whole concept and writing a program or simple code based on algorithms. Along with programming, mathematics and physics were always my favorite subjects. After some study on different engineering disciplines, I knew that mechanical engineering was the right choice for me.
From the first year in mechanical engineering, I was given the chance of developing my leadership skills. I have been the team leader multiple times and as the leader, I organize and distribute the tasks between the team members based on the abilities of writing, CAD, and calculations along with giving every member a chance of helping each other in each task. Since the beginning, I have managed to keep my grades high, use my time to improve further and figure out my passion in engineering.
There is no limit to further learning, especially in the vast major of mechanical engineering. Hence, starting my second year I started looking for a major in which I could continue my postgraduate studies, and that is when I came across computational mechanics among other majors. Moreover, during last semester, I learned about finite element method. The students were a given a project to use finite element method to analyze friction and statics of the surfaces in contact in spurs gears using Abaqus software. I find this method astonishing that it enables engineers to solve real-world problems based on merely computer modeling and simulation of its effects. Hence, with a little additional research, I realized that a degree in computational mechanics benefits me pursue my enthusiasm in engineering disciplines and computational methods.
Studying computational mechanics at University of XXX will allow me to get into research and development in sectors of automotive, and I am considering to do my master thesis in one of the top companies such as BMW. Furthermore, studying in Germany gives the opportunity to improve my German speaking skill as a third language. The most challenging part will be living independently for the first time.
Thank you for considering my application. I will look forward to hear positive response from you.
Sincerely,
I am applying for a masters program in Germany. I would appreciate any feedback regarding the overall quality of my letter of motivation along with any grammar mistake.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this statement to express my interest in Computational Mechanics master course hoping that I will be given the opportunity to study at University of XXX as I believe my academic performance and bachelor of engineering from YYY University will be well suited for this program.
I had the biggest challenge in my academic life when I was 14. I had moved to a new school that taught in English and had a different curriculum than my previous school. The four years of studying there, from 9th to 12th grade, has taught me a lot. I had to cope with the new language and work hard to keep my grades high. The first semester of the new school I was ranked 13th in a class of 28 students with a reasonable total average. But there is always room for improvement so I tried my best, worked hard and graduated among the outstanding students. This phase of my academic journey had a significant effect on me as it taught me not to underestimate myself and work hard for my goals as well as time management since the non-scientific subjects consisted of various new vocabularies.
Nevertheless, high school introduced HTML and Visual Basic programming languages to me and I was absolutely fascinated by the whole concept and writing a program or simple code based on algorithms. Along with programming, mathematics and physics were always my favorite subjects. After some study on different engineering disciplines, I knew that mechanical engineering was the right choice for me.
From the first year in mechanical engineering, I was given the chance of developing my leadership skills. I have been the team leader multiple times and as the leader, I organize and distribute the tasks between the team members based on the abilities of writing, CAD, and calculations along with giving every member a chance of helping each other in each task. Since the beginning, I have managed to keep my grades high, use my time to improve further and figure out my passion in engineering.
There is no limit to further learning, especially in the vast major of mechanical engineering. Hence, starting my second year I started looking for a major in which I could continue my postgraduate studies, and that is when I came across computational mechanics among other majors. Moreover, during last semester, I learned about finite element method. The students were a given a project to use finite element method to analyze friction and statics of the surfaces in contact in spurs gears using Abaqus software. I find this method astonishing that it enables engineers to solve real-world problems based on merely computer modeling and simulation of its effects. Hence, with a little additional research, I realized that a degree in computational mechanics benefits me pursue my enthusiasm in engineering disciplines and computational methods.
Studying computational mechanics at University of XXX will allow me to get into research and development in sectors of automotive, and I am considering to do my master thesis in one of the top companies such as BMW. Furthermore, studying in Germany gives the opportunity to improve my German speaking skill as a third language. The most challenging part will be living independently for the first time.
Thank you for considering my application. I will look forward to hear positive response from you.
Sincerely,
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Dear Sir or Madam : I am writing this statement to express my interest in a Computational Mechanics master course with the hope that I will be given the opportunity to study at the University of *** , as I believe my academic performance and Bachelor's of Engineering from YYY University will be well suited for this program. I had the biggest challenge in my academic life when I was 14. I had moved to a new school that taught in English and had a different curriculum from my previous school.
- Dear Sir or Madam : I am writing this statement to express my interest in a Computational Mechanics master course with the hope that I will be given the opportunity to study at the University of *** , as I believe my academic performance and Bachelor's of Engineering from YYY University will be well suited for this program.
- I had the biggest challenge in my academic life when I was 14.
- I had moved to a new school that taught in English and had a different curriculum from my previous school.
- The four years of studying there, from 9th to 12th grade, taught me a lot.
- I had to cope with the new language and work hard to keep my grades high.
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Dear Sir or Madam:
I am writing this statement to express my interest in a Computational Mechanics master course with the hope that I will be given the opportunity to study at the University of ***, as I believe
I am writing this statement to express my interest in a Computational Mechanics master course with the hope that I will be given the opportunity to study at the University of ***, as I believe
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thank you for pointing out my mistakes. I will fix the incomplete parts.
do you have any suggestion on the content of the letter itself in terms of the message I'm trying to convey? how good will be it be after I fix the mistakes?
do you have any suggestion on the content of the letter itself in terms of the message I'm trying to convey? how good will be it be after I fix the mistakes?
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