letter of motivation

I need help with my letter of motivation for a study abroad in master degree.

I want to apply Rotterdam university and I have a lot of problems with it.
Please kindly help and correct my motivation letter or give me other recommendations.

Here is my letter:
To whom it may concern:

During the Past four years, I studied industrial engineering specialized in quality management. But I have no passion in there and I thought I got wrong decision. In my confusion, my supply chain lecturer asked me to join his research. The research is about value chain and it would be my thesis topic. The big differences between my specialization and my thesis put me in difficult conditions in that time. Before did a research about value chain, I should have adequate knowledge in supply chain. In supply chain, the product is just being transferred without add the value from one to another place. Otherwise, the new package is added in the product will increase the value from itself, is name value chain. Both of them was very difficult topic but successfully increased my adrenalin and built my interest to learn SCM and value chain further. I knew from the beginning that it would be a challenge to complete my research and I was in succeed to accomplish my thesis “Mapping and Analysis of Economic Value Chain in Silver Jewelry Industry Creative Kotagede, Yogyakarta” just in three months. After finished my final thesis, I found my passion in that knowledge so I would continue my supply chain study and also its application in the real world then.

My first step to made my dream comes true is worked in multinational company. My first job was become a supply chain engineer in Samsung Electronics Indonesia. As we all know, Samsung leads the global market in high-tech electronics manufacture digital media. For a leading company in electronics factory, they have highly sophisticated supply chain system which is updated annually. A lot of supply chain knowledge to be gained for working in Samsung and lot of worked have to do in daily. As a supply chain engineer, I handled 300 raw materials from overseas need to be ready in production line. Each material from each supplier has their own characteristic, we need to decide about buy or make decision, looking for the appropriate vendor, choose the right material which already approved by R n D development, check the prices, ensure the quality of the product, choose the right incoterms, check the incoming material should be in the right time with the right quantity not to fast but not to late because we should considered about warehouse space, especially for the material which need a lot of space and also heavy material that should be shipped by vessel. I got A in my final assessment, that’s a great achievement, really difficult to get an A score in the final assessment and I was proud of it. My second achievement was, I would be promoted for senior supply chain engineer in my third years. But unfortunately, I preferred to left Samsung caused I got bigger opportunity to join procurement and general affairs department in Manulife. Manulife is one of famous insurance service industries where has home base in Toronto. I left in Samsung and preferred to join Manulife caused they offered me a position as supervisor and also I have 18 people under me. It was such a challenge that not to be missed. Besides, I can add my knowledge about supply chain in service company, I also can learnt how to managed people and be a good leader for my subordinate. By Joining the service industry such as Manulife is bring my dreams closer. I could learnt the differences supply chain process between manufacturing and service industries, which totally different. The intangibility and heterogeneity in service industry makes this supply chain more complicated. Being a procurement in service industry is very challenging and they are improve my understanding of supply chain management. I clearly get enough point of view about service and manufacturing differences. Furthermore, to get a relationship with professional supply chain, I join Indonesian procurement society.

Since I’m interested in supply chain which evolve as fast as business industry. It is good for me to improve my understanding about supply chain management especially in service area. Rotterdam university has a complete offering to support my goal. Supply chain management will give me a lot of knowledge and experiences. I realize that by joining this program means I will live in Rotterdam for a year, it would be great experiences, to learn new culture and making friends.
Currently, it is difficult to find local university that has good curriculum which focuses on supply chain service area. Therefore, I want to devote myself to my country by working in consultant of procurement, to share my experiences and knowledge to develop my country in many suspect in supply chain.