Letter of motivation

Hi. This is a draft of my motivation letter. Could you correct it?

To whom may concern \ Dear Sirs,
I am writing you to complete my application for Master program of Mechanical Engineering in your University starting from next fall.
In high school I graduated with mathematics and physics as my majors.My final score was 100/100L. I am continuing my academic career with the study of "Mechanical Engineering" at Polytechnic University of Turin. In July 2015 I will graduate with a Bachelor of Science degree with an expected average score above 100/110.
During the summer within the end of High School and the opening of University I was looking on Politecnico di Torino website about some Outgoing Mobily Project. One of them striked me : Politong Project. It is a double degree project organized in this way : the first and third years is held in Italy and the second in China.
The application criteria are extremely selective. Students who want to apply for this project have been submitded to a motivation interview and They must pass a chinese language exam (AGGIUNGERE ESAMI). The main goal of the project is to help creating a new Chinese managerial group open towards Italy and, at the same time, to create a new Italian managerial group with knowledge of the Chinese system. 
At the end I was awarded with one of the ten scholarships available for joining the project.
I have always tried to apply my theoretical knowledge in practice. This is why I took an internships after my chinese experience and why I have been a member of CIFI - Collegio degli Ingegneri Ferroviari Italiani (College of Italian Railway Engineers) since July 2014. This organization helps students to bring their theoretical knowledge to practice.
During my intership I worked for a prokect of locomotive refurbishment and I contributed to issue the documentation such as user and maintenance manual, spare parts manual, weighing test, braking test, etc.etc.
Moreover I have had the opportunity to write a Maintenance manual of APV for Amtrak (National Railroad Passenger Corporation - USA)
My dream is to become a Mechanical Designer, and in particular I want to give my personal contribution in the railways sector.
I was always fascinated by the magnificence which lies behind such machines, but my interest was reinforced thanks to my experience at the Turin Polytechnic, and recently thanks to the Mechanical project in which I was followed by Professor Massimiliano Avalle.
The aim of project was design a double stage parallel axis gearbox using SITI Company as reference for what concern dimensions. The trouble of the project was to maintain the distance between input and output and the transmitted power .
The desire to combine my mechanical knowledges with my computer proeficiency , without moved far away from railway sector, motivated me to engage an internship in Cantene s.r.l.throght which I'm writing my Bachelor Thesis. Cantene is an Energy Department spin off that work in order to solve engineering problems ufing numerical and simulation analyses through 1D and CFD model supports.
Specifically, I'm working with Whitesmoke program wrote in Fortran which takes as input parameter as lenght of gallery, number of FAN, number of ramps, etc.etc. And it gives as output the time variation of pressure, temperature, flow speed etc.etc. In railways tunnels in normal state or in case of fire.
During my third and last year of my Bachelor I am looking for the best educational program which can complete the tools I developed until now, and that will let my passion become my life.
I have an ambition to work as a Mechanical Designer such as Alstom,Hitaki or Siemens. To achieve my goal, an appropriate education is needed and I believe that your university would give me the required academic preparation and practical experience. I am highly motivated by the competitive nature of the field I have chosen. I will work hard to achieve my goals and aspirations. To obtain a degree from EPFL institution will be an honour and if given that chance, I will do my best to succeed. Moreover, The EPFL has an excellent world ranking. Insomuch I am amazed by the University and I trust in you and your program, I have therefore applied only for this university in the Switzerland .
Last but not least the experience offered by foreign Universities will surely improve my communication skills, and will provide me a wider set of possible job links.
Given my past history of commitment to excellence, I am confident That I will bring a high level of energy and enthusiasm to your program. I am sure to Exceed your expectations, Because of Both my academic and interpersonal skills as well as the experience Gained from my internship. I will enrich the program by enabling fellow students and professors to benefit from my ambitious and open nature. Furthermore, my international background and interdisciplinary education blackberries will add diversity to your program.
Thank you for considering my application, I look forward to your answer,

Yours sincerely,