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Letter of motivation
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would anyone please check my letter of motivation regarding content and grammatical mistakes?
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Dear Madame XX,
As a highly motivated and ambitious business administration student, it is quite important for me to gain international experience. That is why I am applying for the Erasmus exchange program, not only because I am aiming to work for an international company in the future but also because I would like to develop myself regarding personal and academic purposes. I think attending XY University would be the best way for me to succeed the most.
In 2013 I finished my A levels with English and math as my honors courses. The reason I picked these two subjects was because I had always been quite good at both and I also enjoyed studying those the most. Furthermore, I had the opportunity to participate in a simulation game called “POL&IS“ (politics and international security) which was hosted by the German armed forces. I got a little insight into the process of the international economic system by playing the role of the Chinese economy minister. Due to “POL&IS“ and my good understanding of math and English I chose to study business administration.
At the moment I am in my third semester and in preparation for studying abroad I started to attend my first lecture in English called “Basics of International Finance“ and also a business English course. Additionally, I am very interested in international affairs, primarily in the business sectors marketing and management. Corresponding with that, XY University is certainly favourable because it offers a great variety of modules which are refering to my prefered branches.
Moreover, this chosen business school has got a top-rated reputation among the ones in Britain. If I got the chance of studying there, it would be an admirable addition to my academic career along with attending Z University.
Furthermore, the picked educational institution is a campus university which I find very exciting. I would love to experience the life on campus because in Germany there is not really something similiar to this concept.
The main reason behind choosing England as exchange country is because of my vast interest for its culture. Considering that I grew up with German and Vietnamese traditions, I have always been open and curious for others. There are for example the small typical British things, like their tea time or them driving on the left, which are fascinating me. In addition, I am generally very passionate about fashion and music. For me, England is the origin of genuinely good musicians such as The Beatles or Elton John. Concerning fashion I also think this country is the most inspiring and matches perfectly with my preferences.
Nevertheless, the language is an important impetus too because I would really like to improve my English. Even though, I am trying to integrate this language in my everyday life as much as I can, for instance reading books or listening to radio in English, I still believe that living in a country where English is the native tongue, is a lot more effective. Besides, I really fancy the British accent that is why I chose England. More importantly, for business purposes it is necessary to be able to speak this language fluently and that is my goal.
In fact, I have not been able to visit England yet and I would like to have the chance of exploring this country regarding my personal interests and also combing this with my academic aims.
I know that I might not be a student with extraordinarily good grades but I am very determined and motivated. Due to language and other difficulties my parents were never really able to help me with school matters, even though they truly wanted to, but there is one thing they taught me and that is to work hard in order to achieve your objectives. If I got picked as exchange student for XY University, I would do my best to accomplish their high requirements. I believe that these qualities distinguish myself from others.
Finally, I would be very honored and grateful, if you gave me the the chance of studying there and also help me to approach my aims by choosing me.
Thank you for your time and consideration of my application.
Sincerely,
would anyone please check my letter of motivation regarding content and grammatical mistakes?
Thank you!
Dear Madame XX,
As a highly motivated and ambitious business administration student, it is quite important for me to gain international experience. That is why I am applying for the Erasmus exchange program, not only because I am aiming to work for an international company in the future but also because I would like to develop myself regarding personal and academic purposes. I think attending XY University would be the best way for me to succeed the most.
In 2013 I finished my A levels with English and math as my honors courses. The reason I picked these two subjects was because I had always been quite good at both and I also enjoyed studying those the most. Furthermore, I had the opportunity to participate in a simulation game called “POL&IS“ (politics and international security) which was hosted by the German armed forces. I got a little insight into the process of the international economic system by playing the role of the Chinese economy minister. Due to “POL&IS“ and my good understanding of math and English I chose to study business administration.
At the moment I am in my third semester and in preparation for studying abroad I started to attend my first lecture in English called “Basics of International Finance“ and also a business English course. Additionally, I am very interested in international affairs, primarily in the business sectors marketing and management. Corresponding with that, XY University is certainly favourable because it offers a great variety of modules which are refering to my prefered branches.
Moreover, this chosen business school has got a top-rated reputation among the ones in Britain. If I got the chance of studying there, it would be an admirable addition to my academic career along with attending Z University.
Furthermore, the picked educational institution is a campus university which I find very exciting. I would love to experience the life on campus because in Germany there is not really something similiar to this concept.
The main reason behind choosing England as exchange country is because of my vast interest for its culture. Considering that I grew up with German and Vietnamese traditions, I have always been open and curious for others. There are for example the small typical British things, like their tea time or them driving on the left, which are fascinating me. In addition, I am generally very passionate about fashion and music. For me, England is the origin of genuinely good musicians such as The Beatles or Elton John. Concerning fashion I also think this country is the most inspiring and matches perfectly with my preferences.
Nevertheless, the language is an important impetus too because I would really like to improve my English. Even though, I am trying to integrate this language in my everyday life as much as I can, for instance reading books or listening to radio in English, I still believe that living in a country where English is the native tongue, is a lot more effective. Besides, I really fancy the British accent that is why I chose England. More importantly, for business purposes it is necessary to be able to speak this language fluently and that is my goal.
In fact, I have not been able to visit England yet and I would like to have the chance of exploring this country regarding my personal interests and also combing this with my academic aims.
I know that I might not be a student with extraordinarily good grades but I am very determined and motivated. Due to language and other difficulties my parents were never really able to help me with school matters, even though they truly wanted to, but there is one thing they taught me and that is to work hard in order to achieve your objectives. If I got picked as exchange student for XY University, I would do my best to accomplish their high requirements. I believe that these qualities distinguish myself from others.
Finally, I would be very honored and grateful, if you gave me the the chance of studying there and also help me to approach my aims by choosing me.
Thank you for your time and consideration of my application.
Sincerely,
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Here are some suggestions: Dear Madame XX, As a highly motivated and ambitious business administration student, it is quite important for me to gain international experience. That is why I am applying for the Erasmus exchange program ; not only because I am aiming to work for an international company in the future but also because I would like to develop myself regarding personal ly and academic ally purposes . I think attending XY University would be the best way for me to succeed the most.
- Here are some suggestions: Dear Madame XX, As a highly motivated and ambitious business administration student, it is quite important for me to gain international experience.
- That is why I am applying for the Erasmus exchange program ; not only because I am aiming to work for an international company in the future but also because I would like to develop myself regarding personal ly and academic ally purposes .
- I think attending XY University would be the best way for me to succeed the most.
- In 2013 I finished my A levels with English and math as my honors courses.
- The reason I picked these two subjects was because I had always been quite good at both and I also enjoyed studying those the most.
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Dear Madame XX,
As a highly motivated and ambitious business administration student, it is quite important for me to gain international experience. That is why I am applying for the Erasmus exchange program; not only because I am aiming to work for an international company in the future but also because I
Dear Madame XX,
As a highly motivated and ambitious business administration student, it is quite important for me to gain international experience. That is why I am applying for the Erasmus exchange program; not only because I am aiming to work for an international company in the future but also because I
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