Letter of motivation

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Hello,I need help with letter of motivation to University...I must write about why I want study there etc.I can write it short,but i need more words to discribe all about my wish to study...I hope u got me.

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

Hello, obsession - and welcome to English Forums. You should not add filler to your letter just to make it longer.

Please read about Letters of Motivation in our [url=] ANNOUNCEMENTS AND FAQS[/url], and if you post your draft letter here, we will check it for you.

MountainHiker · Answer

Just to add the previous comments, here are two additional posts to read:

Mister Micawber · Answer

Yes, indeed!  I must remember to include those links in future, MH.  Good stuff!

Obsession · Answer

Hello. I know what i must need to write,but i cant write it long as I must,its diffuclt for me to find,why I want to go this school etc.

MountainHiker · Answer

obsessionHello. I know what i must need to write,but i cant write it long as I must,its diffuclt for me to find,why I want to go this school etc.

Obsesssion, we're not psychologists. We can't look into your soul to find your true passions and motivations.

You must look at the examples we provided. Then do your best to create your own version. Then, we'll try to help you.

Remember, this exercise is important to you. If it is important to you, then you'll put forward your best efforts.

Obsession · Answer

I understand u:),but I think maybe u have an example from letter of motivation who wanted study Politic or International Relations ?

Obsession · Answer

Hello again:)

I wrote/tried a leter of motivation

Can u help me with this?

what I lack in this text, the errors I have, it should be longer than this?

When i was at an early age I wanted to study in England,learn english,learn more about the english people and tradition.This land was always interested for me,because I had heard so much about England,and I never been there before,so I looking forward it.I want to take Higher Education because it will give me the highest level of knowledge and good work in the future.

Since I was 16 years old I got interess for politics and history.I soon realized that in order to fully understand todays chaotic and globalized world.I started paying attention to everything that is related with politics,because Im grew up in war in Chechnya,before i came to Norway at 14 years old.So I know how it to live under the bombs.Then I decide that I must study politics,to learn how to control land and community.In my life I want to succeed in the political sphere and to bring to my country's some whatis the benefit .

So i did promise to myself to to someone who can influence in this life.

Education in England can help me with to know people from all countries and nations that will help me in life to find acommon theme with people of other countries.

I hope that my dream will come true is studying in England.

MountainHiker · Answer

Obsession, because your life hasn't been easy, I will put in extra effort to help you. However, your first letter needs a lot of work. That is a kind way of saying your first letter was poor. If you want to study in England, your skills will need to improve.

When i was at an early age I wanted to study in England,learn english,learn more about the english people and tradition.This land was always interested for me,because I had heard so much about England,and I never been there before,so I looking forward it.I want to take Higher Education because it will give me the highest level of knowledge and good work in the future.

What do you want to study in England? Which university, which topics, subjects, material? What do you hope to be when you grow up?

Since I was 16 years old I got interess for politics and history.I soon realized that in order to fully understand todays chaotic and globalized world.I started paying attention to everything that is related with politics,because Im grew up in war in Chechnya,before i came to Norway at 14 years old.So I know how it to live under the bombs.Then I decide that I must study politics,to learn how to control land and community.In my life I want to succeed in the political sphere and to bring to my country's some whatis the benefit .

So i did promise to myself to to someone who can influence in this life.

I would change your earlier paragraph to something like...

I grew up in Chechnya, a former Soviet Republic that has seen more than its fair share of war, destruction and terror. At the young age of fourteen, I along with my family moved to Norway, a much more peaceful country. As I grew older, I reflected upon my life and my situation. At the age of sixteen, I became interested in history and politics. Because of my challenging upbringing, I want to learn X so that I can do Y. (You need to tell me more about X and Y.)

Education in England can help me with to know people from all countries and nations that will help me in life to find acommon theme with people of other countries.

I hope that my dream will come true is studying in England.

You don't say very much in that last paragraph.

To make your letter more effective, you need to tell the reader:

- If you are smart...show some evidence

- Your key strengths

- Your passions

- You motivations and ambitions

- Why England? There are lots of good and safe countries, including Norway.

Okay, you need to do some more work.

Obsession · Answer

thank u so much,that u help me...

I know my english its to poor.I dont need to write who I want to be in my future and which university I want to study.

So i tried again to write better,lets see on it..

in the first section,I need to write why I want study in England,quality of England's education:

When I was younger age I told myself that when I grow up I will study In England .Exactly this country I liked more always, and have not the possibility to go there before unfortunately, but life has presented me a gift that gave the chance to go in this country, this is probably what I say "desires are fulfilled." I want to go to London to study, to have a perfect command english language, get a good diploma, a high level of knowledge that will provide me a great future in my future life.

the second section,What I want to study?why I want to learn exactly politicals ?...and why I'm interested in politics?:

Level institutions of England will give me an opportunity to improve myself as a good professional and open way to a great future. In this moment I plan to do on the political department since the policy of our day I care about, and I want to participate in the development of our world and make it my contribution todo something good from myself. I am interested in everything that is connected with the company as it develops and what forces are applied, so that the world has changed and how to promote it all politics.From my childhood I was spent among the war, where I grew up and saw the injustice around me, then as a kid I did not quite grasp, why come I know that everything that happens in our world is connected to a different way with politics, but exactly how remains mysterious There is always a innuendo silence, about which ordinary people and dont think.-all this for me curious and more knowledge in this area, I aspire.I want to go iniversity where I could share and listen to the views of other peoples, cultures and nationalities will give me more experience in my future life.My free time I like to read news, and psychology. I think that psychology and politics are connected between themselves. Psychology is my hobby, its my sense meaning each day.

I grew up in Chechnya, a former Soviet Republic that has seen more than its fair share of war, destruction and terror. At the young age of fourteen, I along with my family moved to Norway, a much more peaceful country. As I grew older, I reflected upon my life and my situation. At the age of sixteen, I became interested in history and politics. Because of my challenging upbringing, I want to learn all about history and politics,cuz it important to know how changes word,how communication between countries all of this its very interested for me,and I want learn more apply all that.

My future, I see only the inside of politics, I want to achieve success in this area andachieve a good level.I wish create one for community better who need help and leave a good behind even a trace of my self, to prove to myself that I was not in vain to live this life, that's my goal .

the last third section,I need to show why politics learn can bring me in my future life:

Education in England like politics can help me with my future work like a politics.I'm going to be a good speaker,speaker in english to communicate with other people what is important to my future work.

I have no idea what I can write more....its all I think. Do u think its not enough?:(

MountainHiker · Answer

in the first section,I need to write why I want study in England,quality of England's education:

When I was younger age I told myself that when I grow up I will study In England .Exactly this country I liked more always, and have not the possibility to go there before unfortunately, but life has presented me a gift that gave the chance to go in this country, this is probably what I say "desires are fulfilled." I want to go to London to study, to have a perfect command english language, get a good diploma, a high level of knowledge that will provide me a great future in my future life.

This first section above is poor. You haven't answered the question: WHY? Nor have you discussed the quality of the education. If someone asked me why Obsession wanted to study in England, I would just shoulder shrug back.

You didn't answer the questions. And what you wrote is poor and hard to follow.

the second section,What I want to study?why I want to learn exactly politicals ?...and why I'm interested in politics?:

Level institutions of England will give me an opportunity to improve myself as a good professional and open way to a great future. In this moment I plan to do on the political department since the policy of our day I care about, and I want to participate in the development of our world and make it my contribution todo something good from myself. I am interested in everything that is connected with the company as it develops and what forces are applied, so that the world has changed and how to promote it all politics.From my childhood I was spent among the war, where I grew up and saw the injustice around me, then as a kid I did not quite grasp, why come I know that everything that happens in our world is connected to a different way with politics, but exactly how remains mysterious There is always a innuendo silence, about which ordinary people and dont think.-all this for me curious and more knowledge in this area, I aspire.I want to go iniversity where I could share and listen to the views of other peoples, cultures and nationalities will give me more experience in my future life.My free time I like to read news, and psychology. I think that psychology and politics are connected between themselves. Psychology is my hobby, its my sense meaning each day.

I grew up in Chechnya, a former Soviet Republic that has seen more than its fair share of war, destruction and terror. At the young age of fourteen, I along with my family moved to Norway, a much more peaceful country. As I grew older, I reflected upon my life and my situation. At the age of sixteen, I became interested in history and politics. Because of my challenging upbringing, I want to learn all about history and politics,cuz it important to know how changes word,how communication between countries all of this its very interested for me,and I want learn more apply all that.

My future, I see only the inside of politics, I want to achieve success in this area andachieve a good level.I wish create one for community better who need help and leave a good behind even a trace of my self, to prove to myself that I was not in vain to live this life, that's my goal .

Obsession, your paragraphs above are poor again. They are chaotic and disorganized. You need to carefully organized your thoughts and words. You need to find someone locally who can help you organize your thoughts. Going back and forth here in the forum will frustrate you.

You have slang "cuz" that will kill your application.

the last third section,I need to show why politics learn can bring me in my future life:

Education in England like politics can help me with my future work like a politics.I'm going to be a good speaker,speaker in english to communicate with other people what is important to my future work.

I have no idea what I can write more..its all I think. Do u think its not enough?:(

Again, you didn't answer the questions. You just said, "I like politics and want to be successful." Okay, but you didn't show your reader your future career path of how you plan to use your education.

Do I think it is enough? In all honesty, you need to find some local assistance. Then you need to recreate your letter.

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