Letter of motivation

Hallo Englishforum-Team!
I've just wrote a motivation letter to a hospital in Ireland. I want to go there, because it's a very good opportunity to improve my English, but I have to write a very good and correct letter of motivation first to get an elective there.
Would you take a look and say, what I'd better change?
Thanks a lot!
Dear Ms...,


Surgery is that medical discipline, I am binding my future. I like that it requires from one medical knowledge and applied handicraft as well. During this elective I am eager to gain a better insight into various operation techniques and various treatments of diseases, but , especially, a practical site of surgery – for the surgeons required character traits, their opinion about surgical discipline – being as an observer or, if possible, by assisting at the operations by holding the hook, for example. In order to collect some kind of experience in this area I have started to work as the second operation assistant in the gynaecological department whenever I find it possible. I have attended a surgical “crash-course” to be able to make surgical knots and also put stitches in a wound and have done some private studies on the subject.

While attending Riga English Grammar School I have met such authors as George Bernard Shaw, Samuell Beckett, also Roddy Doyle. The latter could carry me away with his novels about ordinary Irish workpeople and their sometimes witty dialogs. From my friends as in Latvia, as in Germany I have often heard their excitement about the beautiful Irish nature, marvellous Atlantic coastline. Free week-ends and a week after my elective I will surely spend on travelling. The wish to improve my knowledge of foreign people and cultures as well as my social skills and my foreign languages urged me to apply for the elective in Ireland.

It is of great importance to me to experience the way you treat patients and how different experts, nurses and physicians cooperate in order to heal. By comparison I will have then a better view on the situation in Germany. A small fact, that the pathological department, where I am working on my doctoral thesis, is chaired of Univ.-Prof. ... from Ireland in a way inclined my choice towards Ireland, and not Malta, and shows also the high quality of Irish medical education.

I am friendly, hard working, highly motivated and enjoy working as a part of a team. I like the challenge of new situations and cope stressful situations well.

I would be very grateful if you volunteer me in the Surgery department.

With kind regards,