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Anonymous Posted 20 years ago
Letter Writing
letter of application
Hello,
my name is Soeren and I need your help. I must write a letter of application for my study. Could you please help me and check the grammar of my letter? I am not sure but I would say that there are mistakes in my letter.
Here is the letter:
Application for a place in your Bachelor of Aviation Management programme
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to you to apply for a place in your Bachelor of Aviation Management programme at your University of Applied Sciences XXX.
At present I am attending the Humboldt Grammar School in XXX. I will sit my A-Levels in May 2006 and would like to begin my study thereafter.
I am keen to take up the study of Aviation Management as I am very interested in the fields of aviation and commerce. In addition, studying at your University of Applied Sciences would be ideal in helping me broaden my knowledge of foreign languages.
Various information leaflets and conversations with employees from the Schoenefeld Airport in Berlin have enabled me to learn a great deal about the requirements of Aviation Management.
Due to a voluntarily stay in an English Language School in Great Britain during my summer school break in 2005, I enhanced my written and spoken English skills. After nine years of learning English I am now fluent in this language. To my knowledge of foreign languages also belongs Russian which I have been learning since seven years now.
I would be very pleased to be given the opportunity to attend an interview.
Yours faithfully,
name name
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Thank your very much!
my name is Soeren and I need your help. I must write a letter of application for my study. Could you please help me and check the grammar of my letter? I am not sure but I would say that there are mistakes in my letter.
Here is the letter:
Application for a place in your Bachelor of Aviation Management programme
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to you to apply for a place in your Bachelor of Aviation Management programme at your University of Applied Sciences XXX.
At present I am attending the Humboldt Grammar School in XXX. I will sit my A-Levels in May 2006 and would like to begin my study thereafter.
I am keen to take up the study of Aviation Management as I am very interested in the fields of aviation and commerce. In addition, studying at your University of Applied Sciences would be ideal in helping me broaden my knowledge of foreign languages.
Various information leaflets and conversations with employees from the Schoenefeld Airport in Berlin have enabled me to learn a great deal about the requirements of Aviation Management.
Due to a voluntarily stay in an English Language School in Great Britain during my summer school break in 2005, I enhanced my written and spoken English skills. After nine years of learning English I am now fluent in this language. To my knowledge of foreign languages also belongs Russian which I have been learning since seven years now.
I would be very pleased to be given the opportunity to attend an interview.
Yours faithfully,
name name
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Thank your very much!
Top answer
Maybe a little too brief? I take it there is an accompanying form with full details of your studies and so on, but the letter does need to expand a little to help you stand out from all the other applications. You might want to include why you wish to attend that specific university and course, and what career you hope to follow afterwards and how this qualification will help you achieve that.
- Maybe a little too brief?
- I take it there is an accompanying form with full details of your studies and so on, but the letter does need to expand a little to help you stand out from all the other applications.
- You might want to include why you wish to attend that specific university and course, and what career you hope to follow afterwards and how this qualification will help you achieve that.
- Overall the letter is good.
- You need to rephrase this sentence though 'To my knowledge of foreign languages also belongs Russian which I have been learning since seven years now' as it is ungrammatical.
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Maybe a little too brief? I take it there is an accompanying form with full details of your studies and so on, but the letter does need to expand a little to help you stand out from all the other applications. You might want to include why you wish to attend that specific university and course, and what career you hope to follow afterwards and how this qualification will help you achieve that.
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