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Anonymous Posted 16 years ago
Letter Writing
Letter for applying secondary school
I draft the letter for my niece on behalf of my sister-in-law but i don't know this is correct English or not. Please help.
Draft:
Dear Principal,
I am a parent who is seeking an open and lively learning environment for my daughter in order for her to achieve a balanced development in academic, moral, physical and artistic qualities, as well as to nurture the values of love, goodness and truth. After researching secondary schools, I am greatly impressed by your school's educational philosophy, dedicated teaching staff, overall facilities and excellent track record. Therefore, I would like to apply on behalf of my daughter, XXXXX, for admission into Form 1 of your school.
XXXXX has been studying at XXXXX school since 2005. Through her studies she gained a strong academic background as well as developed her moral values and artistic qualities. Moreover, she earned high marks in different subjects including Chinese, English and Putonghua.
In addition to academic achievement, we have provided opportunities for XXXXX to better develop her other abilities and talents. She has participated in various extra-curricular activities including classic and modern dance, arts class, and English drama club. Her talents are well recognized as evidenced by the awards she obtained. She enjoys her activities and frequently wins awards as recognition of her talents. She was the first runner up of the Modern Dance Competition and the Champion of three drama competitions. Many other awards have been won as well.
Furthermore, XXXXX is dedicated to serve others. She has been the monitress and school prefect, librarian and member of XXX club. These activities have helped her build up her confidence, responsibility and interpersonal skills.
We sincerely hope that XXXXX can be admitted to your school, where she will receive appropriate guidance and continue to develop and express her unique individuality.
Enclosed are the application form and the required documents. I look forward to your favourable reply.
Many thanks
Draft:
Dear Principal,
I am a parent who is seeking an open and lively learning environment for my daughter in order for her to achieve a balanced development in academic, moral, physical and artistic qualities, as well as to nurture the values of love, goodness and truth. After researching secondary schools, I am greatly impressed by your school's educational philosophy, dedicated teaching staff, overall facilities and excellent track record. Therefore, I would like to apply on behalf of my daughter, XXXXX, for admission into Form 1 of your school.
XXXXX has been studying at XXXXX school since 2005. Through her studies she gained a strong academic background as well as developed her moral values and artistic qualities. Moreover, she earned high marks in different subjects including Chinese, English and Putonghua.
In addition to academic achievement, we have provided opportunities for XXXXX to better develop her other abilities and talents. She has participated in various extra-curricular activities including classic and modern dance, arts class, and English drama club. Her talents are well recognized as evidenced by the awards she obtained. She enjoys her activities and frequently wins awards as recognition of her talents. She was the first runner up of the Modern Dance Competition and the Champion of three drama competitions. Many other awards have been won as well.
Furthermore, XXXXX is dedicated to serve others. She has been the monitress and school prefect, librarian and member of XXX club. These activities have helped her build up her confidence, responsibility and interpersonal skills.
We sincerely hope that XXXXX can be admitted to your school, where she will receive appropriate guidance and continue to develop and express her unique individuality.
Enclosed are the application form and the required documents. I look forward to your favourable reply.
Many thanks
Top answer
Hi. Your letter is well written. I made a few minor changes for you.
- Hi.
- Your letter is well written.
- I made a few minor changes for you.
- Good luck!
- Dear Principal, I am a parent who is seeking an open and lively learning environment for my daughter in order for her to achieve experience a b alanced development in academic, moral, physical and artistic qualities, as well as have the values of love, goodness and truth nurtured in her.
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Hi. Your letter is well written. I made a few minor changes for you. Good luck!
Dear Principal,
I am a parent who is seeking an open and lively learning environment for my daughter in order for her to achieve experience a balanced development
Dear Principal,
I am a parent who is seeking an open and lively learning environment for my daughter in order for her to
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Lowveld Adventist Primary School
Post Office Box 421
Chiredzi
26 January 2019
The Headmaster
Nyazura Mission
Private bag 921
Mutare
Dear sir/madam
RE:APPLICATION FOR FORM ONE PLACE
My name is Micah Chitesa.I am a boy aged 11.I am studying at Lowveld Adventist Primary school.
I am as good as gold in all subjects.My favourate is m
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