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Vsuresh Posted 11 years ago
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From XYZ



6 May 2015

XYZ

Subject: Pay Scale

Respected Sir
I would like to inform you that though I have been promoted from Middle School to High School where I teach Mathematics for grades 9 and 10,the basic pay I have received for the month of April is that the school offers to the middle school teachers

I have put in my most sincere efforts in the best interest of the students and the institution ever since I joined this institution in March 2012.

Please consider my situation and increase my basic salary to the scale eligible for High School teachers.

Thank you for your kind consideration

Yours sincerely
  

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Rather than simply look at the grammar, I would like to suggest an overall revision (keeping to your words as much as possible). Here is how I would say it: 6 May 2015 XYZ Subject: Pay Scale Correction Dear sir: Although I have been promoted from Middle School to High School (where I teach mathematics for grades 9 and 10), the basic pay I received for the month of April continues to be the school's rate for middle school teachers. I have always worked to advance the best interests of the students and the institution since I joined the school in March 2012.

— Doctor D

  • Rather than simply look at the grammar, I would like to suggest an overall revision (keeping to your words as much as possible).
  • Here is how I would say it: 6 May 2015 XYZ Subject: Pay Scale Correction Dear sir: Although I have been promoted from Middle School to High School (where I teach mathematics for grades 9 and 10), the basic pay I received for the month of April continues to be the school's rate for middle school teachers.
  • I have always worked to advance the best interests of the students and the institution since I joined the school in March 2012.
  • So please review my situation.
  • I believe I am not only eligible for the high school teachers' salary scale but also fully deserving of that rate of pay.
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Rather than simply look at the grammar, I would like to suggest an overall revision (keeping to your words as much as possible). Here is how I would say it:

6 May 2015

XYZ

Subject: Pay Scale Correction

Dear sir:

Although I have been promoted from Middle School to High School (where I teach mathematics for grades 9 and 10), the basic pay I rec
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