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Aruzhan Zheksembaeva Posted 11 years ago
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lease, check my essay on grammar, vocabulary and idea
Topic: describe any unique characteristics of your school (for university, they said that essay should be unique, if you have an ideas or advices how to make it non-typical please tell me)
The school about which I would like to tell is called “______”, where I have been studying for 5 years. Why this school is exceptional compared to other schools?
First of all, this school follows atypical requirement for their students about skills according to which I was chosen from another 1000 students. The representative student must have a not only learning ability, but also be adaptive to any conditions because our students often travel around the world. Personally, because of the participation in a social life of my school, I was rewarded with opportunity to join to expedition group on twice.
During these five years, I saw how my friends left one-by-one. Some of them had a talent but did not have a desire, whereas others studied 24 hours. It is not enough to only study, you should have also a talent to be here or visa-versa. There must be a balance between talent and learning skills.
The particular attention is given to the critical thinking skills. Concentrating on the development of personality and leadership, I was taught on the lesson of global perspectives how to be a strong strategist, who will be able to figure out any problems and have a plan B in any cases.
Generally, the main feature of my school is that teaching future genial strategists it brings up students, who will be able to be winners in any conditions and survive in a cruel reality of modern world. Anyone who was graduated from there will be able to face with any problems that appeared in front of him.
The school about which I would like to tell is called “______”, where I have been studying for 5 years. Why this school is exceptional compared to other schools?
First of all, this school follows atypical requirement for their students about skills according to which I was chosen from another 1000 students. The representative student must have a not only learning ability, but also be adaptive to any conditions because our students often travel around the world. Personally, because of the participation in a social life of my school, I was rewarded with opportunity to join to expedition group on twice.
During these five years, I saw how my friends left one-by-one. Some of them had a talent but did not have a desire, whereas others studied 24 hours. It is not enough to only study, you should have also a talent to be here or visa-versa. There must be a balance between talent and learning skills.
The particular attention is given to the critical thinking skills. Concentrating on the development of personality and leadership, I was taught on the lesson of global perspectives how to be a strong strategist, who will be able to figure out any problems and have a plan B in any cases.
Generally, the main feature of my school is that teaching future genial strategists it brings up students, who will be able to be winners in any conditions and survive in a cruel reality of modern world. Anyone who was graduated from there will be able to face with any problems that appeared in front of him.
Top answer
I've tried to edit it as much as possible. However, it is still not up to standard. Here are some tips: 1 - Use a more formal style.
- I've tried to edit it as much as possible.
- However, it is still not up to standard.
- Here are some tips: 1 - Use a more formal style.
- 2 - The essay is supposed to be about the school, but I notice that you've mostly focused on yourself.
- 3 - Qualify your language and stay away from absolute or strong statements.
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I've tried to edit it as much as possible. However, it is still not up to standard. Here are some tips:
1 - Use a more formal style.
2 - The essay is supposed to be about the school, but I notice that you've mostly focused on yourself.
1 - Use a more formal style.
2 - The essay is supposed to be about the school, but I notice that you've mostly focused on yourself.
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