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Sara Saad Posted 13 years ago
Grammar

:l help

Hi every one
I faced difficult to write my topic sentence in descriptive paragraph

I want you check my topic sentence if there are mistakes or give me suggests

( as someone enters my room, he or she will absolutely admire the beauty of my room )

Any suggest ?

I spend one hour to write the topic sentence ;(
  

Top answer

That does not clearly tell me your topic. Do you want to write about the person? Or do you want to write about your room?

— Clive

  • That does not clearly tell me your topic.
  • Do you want to write about the person?
  • Or do you want to write about your room?
  • Try to keep it clear and simple.
  • How about this?
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That does not clearly tell me your topic.

Do you want to write about the person?
Or do you want to write about your room?

Try to keep it clear and simple.
How about this?
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When someone enters my room, they will absolutely truely admire its beauty. of my room

That is a good opening statement, but not a thesis.
What makes your room beautiful?

This might be a thesis that you can prove in an essay:

I have the most beautiful room in my city.
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