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Suhanii Posted 18 years ago
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Kindly rectify the eng & grammer in this para..

The illustrations of Condom and intra uterine devices, on the very first sight gave an impression of you being an adjuvant to Family Planning Commission, trying to increase the 'couple protection rate' promoting these products. It's a surprise that you also own a company which is working diligently to bring humanity closer by making all gel, jellies and patches. Wish you all the success in this new venture.
  

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At first sight, the illustrations of condoms and intrauterine devices , on the very first sight gave an impression of you being gave the impression that you were an adjuvant to [This is an odd word to use here. Something like "working for" or "affiliated with" would be better] the Family Planning Commission, trying to increase the 'couple protection rate' promoting these products [I'm not quite sure what you mean by "couple protection rate". ] .

— Mr Wordy

  • At first sight, the illustrations of condoms and intrauterine devices , on the very first sight gave an impression of you being gave the impression that you were an adjuvant to [This is an odd word to use here.
  • Something like "working for" or "affiliated with" would be better] the Family Planning Commission, trying to increase the 'couple protection rate' promoting these products [I'm not quite sure what you mean by "couple protection rate".
  • ] .
  • It's a surprise that you also own a company which is working diligently to bring humanity closer [This doesn't sound right; don't really understand what you mean] by making all gel, jellies and patches [What sorts of products are these?
  • Are they unrelated to contraception?
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At first sight, the illustrations of condoms and intrauterine devices, on the very first sight gave an impression of you being gave the impression that you were an adjuvant to [This is an odd word to use here. Something like "working for" or "affiliated with" would be better] the Family Planning Commission, trying t
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Thanks Wordy for the correction.
It was an attempt to write a satire.
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suhaniiThanks Wordy for the correction.
It was an attempt to write a satire.

Oh. You should have mentioned that!
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