Kindly help to make it sound personal

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00 00At 00, we always believe in providing our customers with something that gives 00them00 pleasure and exceeds 00their00 00expectations00. 00 00We would like to share with our 01b00patrons02b00 the news00 of an excellent investment opportunity, which will yield great returns.02br
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00 00We are00 offering00 two commercial properties 00for immediate00 possession – Marathon Vastu and Marathon Corner - in the 00upcoming00 suburb of Airoli, 00just a stone's throw away from the station00. Investment in these00 properties will make your coffer00s00 00overflow 00with profit. This is an immense opportunit01i00y02i00 00with 01b00possible02b00 rapid returns as the space can be leased00 to entrepreneurial businesses, gymnasiums, hospitals, banks and clinics.02br
00 00To grab the lion's share00,00 call us now, because within a blink of an eye this opportunity might 00vanish00.00Regards,02br
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01b00 The above is sales letter I have following queries for the same02b02br
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001. I am addressing Dear..., It's personal, in the first para we are using ...our patrons here it sounds very general what is the alternative to make it sound personal 02br
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002. In second para... with posible rapid returns is not giving the punch I mean it is sounding as if there is a risk of failure and neither i want to sound that it's a guaranteed success...I though it to replace with .....the immediate results, is it approporiate?0-