0
Shafi Rehma Posted 12 years ago
Kindly correct my poem
The Lost Key
I’m a man without a name;
wandering here to find a fame.
Is it better to stay away?
or move ahead on this way.
I’m a desire found in heart,
eager to show my art.
Was it you or a glimpse of me?
I've lost in the sea,
Still in search for the lost key;
To open the treasures found in me.
I’m a man without a name;
wandering here to find a fame.
Is it better to stay away?
or move ahead on this way.
I’m a desire found in heart,
eager to show my art.
Was it you or a glimpse of me?
I've lost in the sea,
Still in search for the lost key;
To open the treasures found in me.
Top answer
This is how I would revise it, in accordance with current US syntax: The Key I'm a man with no name wandering about to find fame. Would it be better to just go away, or to continue on in this way? My desire is in my heart and I'm eager to show my art.
- This is how I would revise it, in accordance with current US syntax: The Key I'm a man with no name wandering about to find fame.
- Would it be better to just go away, or to continue on in this way?
- My desire is in my heart and I'm eager to show my art.
- Was it you who caught a glimpse of me, and saw I was lost, as at sea?
- Still I search for the key, to open the treasure that is in me.
Get the Weekly English Kit 📬
New words, one handy idiom, and a 2-minute quiz — delivered to your inbox to keep your streak alive.
3 Answers
0
This is how I would revise it, in accordance with current US syntax:
The Key
I'm a man with no name
wandering about to find fame.
Would it be better to just go away,
or to continue on in this way?
My desire is in my heart
and I'm eager to show my art.
Was it you who caught a glimpse of me,
and saw I was lost, as at sea?
Still I search for the key,
The Key
I'm a man with no name
wandering about to find fame.
Would it be better to just go away,
or to continue on in this way?
My desire is in my heart
and I'm eager to show my art.
Was it you who caught a glimpse of me,
and saw I was lost, as at sea?
Still I search for the key,
00
0
Shafi Rehma The Lost Key
I’m a man without a name;
wandering here to find a fame.
Is it better to stay away?
or move ahead on this way.
I’m a desire found in heart,
eager to show my art.
Was it you or a glimpse of me?
I've lost in the sea,
Still in search for the lost key;
To open the treasures found in me.
Somehow th
0
Related Questions