KGSP _U personal statement

am applying for The Korean Government Scholarship for (KGSP) and thundergraduateis is my personal statement. I hope someone would take the time to help me fix a few grammatical errors, and if there's a need to edit the content and structure, or something I could add to strengthen my case.

The instructions should be followed

- Motivations with which you apply for this program

- Family and Education background

- Significant experiences you have had; risks you have taken and achievements you have made, persons or events that have had a significant influence on you

- Extracurricular activities such as club activities, community service activities or work experiences

- If applicable, describe awards you have received, publications you have made, or skills you have acquired, etc.

The statement:

My name is shahd Albasim, 19 years old, I live in Khartoum, I grew up in a well-off middle-class family. My mother was a lawyer, and my father ks a teacher .I have one sister, we're twin, However, my comfortable life was shaken when my perants get divorce when I was 5 years old, My mother devoted her life to raising us and teaching us in the best schools, and we showed clear excellence throughout our academic career, At 2016, my High School awarded me a Certificate of High Achievements, in recognition of my scoring a percentage of 94.3% in the First Semester.
I graduated from Khartoum North Model secondary school in Khartoum with distinction, marked as a percentage of 94.9%, of the Sudan Secondary School Certificate system. While at High School, I have always maintained excellent grades, specially in Mathematics , Physics and Chemistry .
Moreover, l was among the top hundred students of the Sudan Secondary School Certificate Examination for the year 2016-2017 . That high score granted me admission to the Forum of Outstanding Sudanese Students (FOSS). This brought much happiness and pride to my heart and my family. Bringing joy and high sense of achievement to my parents As they get back in Touch again after all of these years, and last year they get back to each other and we all live happilly together now , being well rewarded for the hard work and intensive studying hours I went through, with their help and encouragement.
I believe that joining FOSS was my the best reward for all the hard work I went through to be able to have my name listed among the of top hundred students in the Sudanese certificate-2017 . As a member, I was entitled to attend several trainings, workshops and events at various fields; and I have learnt allot of material in different fields, such as social, cultural, academic and other That made me feel so grateful to belong to such entity, and make sure to give back to the community, through exercising the knowledge and experience I gained.
It is worth mentioning that, I have previously applied, in March 2019, for the University of Science and Technology South Korea (UST) Internship Program, and I have successfully passed the first screening, but unfortunately at the second screening, I received an email of rejection. I have learnt from that experience to further develop my skills, and become more focused in preparing and fulfilling the requirements of future applications. So I started to learn wed development, Python Programming language, I took the ICDL Course on Edraak platform, and apply again in March 2020, I passed the first screening, even I conducted a short interview with the professor of the lab that i have been chosen for the internship, but Sadly The UST PR and International Affairs Team announce the cancellation of the Internship due to spread of COVID-19.
Making a difference no matter how small has always been one of my greatest ambitions. Having been brought up with strong family values,I have been taught that further education would provide many opportunities for me to develop both as a person and as a member of society . So I took initiative in joining Alamaal platform which is a Sudanese educational platform aimed to developing scientific content, scientific material and educational technology and now I am the ambassador of this platform at my university .
Also I am volunteering with Takaful charity organization in sponsorship orphans's children,in Takaful we know that those kids is looking for love,a shoulder to lean on and friendship so that is where we play our roles .
In addition to my strong motive and hardworking nature, when given the chance of studying in a suitable academic environment with expert professors and well-established facilities, such as Korean High Education Institutes, I will work hard to become a successful student in my study. I strongly believe that studying in Korea, being such an advanced country will provide me a platform to prove my learning qualities and excel through advanced teaching methods, accompanied with lots of practical experimenting, under the guidance of exceptionally devoted and experienced professors. In addition, living in Korea will help in expanding my exposure to different cultural experiences; specially, that I have a strong passion for learning different languages ??and cultures. Currently, I have already started studying Korean language and French
In conclusion; I would like to point out that I am determined to do a big effort for this opportunity. I believe that being a student in Korean university would not only empower my career development, but would give me the power to give back to my country, Sudan; upon finishing my studies and returning back, fully equipped with the knowledge and skills necessary for the country's development.
Thank you for considering my personal statement and, hopefully, your esteemed scholarship committee may allow me the opportunity to enjoy the experience of studying for a bachelor degree at the field Electrical Engineering in one the leading Korean universities