Kelly was sitting on a bench. Her phone lost the internet connection.

Hello.

Are the following grammatically correct?

Kelly was sitting on a bench. Her phone lost the internet connection.

“Damn phone!” Kelly said, very angry.

At that moment, Jim, 45, tall, handsome, approached to Kelly.

“It’s just a part of the plan of these damn phones to conquer the world. The first step is driving us crazy.” Jim said.

After the comment, Kelly smiled.

“Sorry, I am having a bad day” Kelly replied.

“No problem. Do you want to join our special group?” Jim asked.

“I don‘t know.” Kelly answered without being too convinced

“Come on. Besides we are a secret organization against the tyranny of the evil cell phones.”
“Ok.” Kelly answered, with a smile on her face.

Kelly followed James to the courtyard.

Thanks.