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Anonymous Posted 11 years ago
Letter Writing
job application cover note help needed
Hi guys, could someone perhaps have a look at my proposed job application cover note? I can no longer tell if it's right or spot mistakes. Please note that the experience I'm referring to is from my past role and I no longer work there. I don't want the note to sound too formal (definitely not academic), but it still has to be good English.
Here it is:
Dear [name],
I am very interested in the Regulatory Manager role advertised on your website. I understand that you are looking for a candidate with regulatory exposure gained at the FCA or a financial services business. My background is slightly different (legal), but I feel I might be the right candidate nevertheless.
I have two years of paralegal experience from [company name]. During that time, I gained considerable exposure to financial regulation and regulatory bodies. That practical experience, together with my studies for a diploma in regulatory compliance, has equipped me with a very good practical knowledge of FCA sourcebooks, and with an understanding of wholesale markets practices. As you will see from my CV, I also have a strong academic background, highly developed analytical skills, and experience in leading successful teams.
I take a keen interest in the financial sector and its regulation, and I am looking for a regulation-focused role with a reputable financial services consultancy. In return, I can offer not only my transferable skills and practical knowledge, but also much enthusiasm for delivering results.
My CV is attached for your consideration.
Thank you in advance for taking the time to review my application. Please do not hesitate to contact me if you would like any further information.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Kind regards,
[my name]
Here it is:
Dear [name],
I am very interested in the Regulatory Manager role advertised on your website. I understand that you are looking for a candidate with regulatory exposure gained at the FCA or a financial services business. My background is slightly different (legal), but I feel I might be the right candidate nevertheless.
I have two years of paralegal experience from [company name]. During that time, I gained considerable exposure to financial regulation and regulatory bodies. That practical experience, together with my studies for a diploma in regulatory compliance, has equipped me with a very good practical knowledge of FCA sourcebooks, and with an understanding of wholesale markets practices. As you will see from my CV, I also have a strong academic background, highly developed analytical skills, and experience in leading successful teams.
I take a keen interest in the financial sector and its regulation, and I am looking for a regulation-focused role with a reputable financial services consultancy. In return, I can offer not only my transferable skills and practical knowledge, but also much enthusiasm for delivering results.
My CV is attached for your consideration.
Thank you in advance for taking the time to review my application. Please do not hesitate to contact me if you would like any further information.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Kind regards,
[my name]
Top answer
There are a few minor suggestions, but I think you have not put your best foot forward. The phrasing can be a more positive tone. Dear [name], I am very interested in the Regulatory Manager position advertised on your website.
- There are a few minor suggestions, but I think you have not put your best foot forward.
- The phrasing can be a more positive tone.
- Dear [name], I am very interested in the Regulatory Manager position advertised on your website.
- I understand that you are looking for a candidate with regulatory exposure gained at the FCA or a financial services business.
- My background is slightly different (legal), but I feel I might be the right candidate nevertheless.
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There are a few minor suggestions, but I think you have not put your best foot forward. The phrasing can be a more positive tone.
Dear [name],
I am very interested in the Regulatory Manager position advertised on your website. I understand that you are looking for a candidate with regulatory exposure gained at the FCA or a financial services business. My background is slig
Dear [name],
I am very interested in the Regulatory Manager position advertised on your website. I understand that you are looking for a candidate with regulatory exposure gained at the FCA or a financial services business. My background is slig
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Thank you very much AlpheccaStars, that's really helpful. Any particular reason why the word 'position' is better than a 'role' in this context?
I agree with your comments on the tone and content.
Again, thanks a lot for your help!
I agree with your comments on the tone and content.
Again, thanks a lot for your help!
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Position is more formal and also refers to that specific job opening.
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AnonymousThank you very much AlpheccaStars, that's really helpful. Any particular reason why the word 'position' is better than a 'role' in this context?In a position, you can perform many roles. For example: team leader, advisor to the comptroller, interviewer for new hires, and maker of the morning coffee (you get to the office before everyone else).
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